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Dang, One RUFF take and I'm behind the WOOD SHED! 

this will make a great track behind some vocals. i like the guitar from 0'45. of course the mix is a rough one so i won't comment on that, but i like the different dynamics you have worked into this one...now try and get a different tempo in there in the (yet to come) mid-section - if there's one crit of your stuff Bobby it's that things tend to be a bit one-paced/volumed throughout...whereas here you have the clean/heavy thing going on....(lead guitar is out of tune...)
as i say, expand on the clean verse/chorus thing, add a different lead break, build up the chorus for the ending...assuming a decent vocalist...could be a winner!

Sounds like it could be a winner, depending on what the vocals bring.  I guess it's hard to say much else - you've acknowledged that the mix is incomplete, but I'd just add that it already sounds pretty good.  That said, even on a rough-mix basis, I'd bring the lead guitar down a notch or two as it's drowning out the rest of the song, and I'd bring the bass up a touch (but I'm a bassist, so take that for what it's worth ).

mgh


this will make a great track behind some vocals. i like the guitar from 0'45. of course the mix is a rough one so i won't comment on that, but i like the different dynamics you have worked into this one...now try and get a different tempo in there in the (yet to come) mid-section - if there's one crit of your stuff Bobby it's that things tend to be a bit one-paced/volumed throughout...whereas here you have the clean/heavy thing going on....(lead guitar is out of tune...)
as i say, expand on the clean verse/chorus thing, add a different lead break, build up the chorus for the ending...assuming a decent vocalist...could be a winner!

Thanks, I have words for it, they were written a long time ago. I think I'll add them to the original post. LOL, you caught that on the lead, I was trying to figure out what I done originally on a 4 track many years ago. I have a mixdown of that and the master cassette tapes but sadly nothing to play or work with the masters with. That's probably a good thing, the original version was so out of whack it's funny to listen to now.


Not sure where this one will end up. We shall see.

Thanks again

cryophonik


Sounds like it could be a winner, depending on what the vocals bring.  I guess it's hard to say much else - you've acknowledged that the mix is incomplete, but I'd just add that it already sounds pretty good.  That said, even on a rough-mix basis, I'd bring the lead guitar down a notch or two as it's drowning out the rest of the song, and I'd bring the bass up a touch (but I'm a bassist, so take that for what it's worth ).

Thank you, I think your spot on about the bass. Perhaps a cleaner tone and a bit more volume on the bass? That's what I'm thinking.

It all seems to sound garbled to me when listening to it on the cake software, the more I adjust volume levels the more I realize I'm working my way toward the sound of nothing. :-) 

Thanks, I appreciate the help. I go back and forth on the bass, sometimes it sounds better playing with a guitar pick for consistency, and other times depending on the tune it sounds better being played with my fingers giving it more thump. This is where I go to la la land on the bass, I'm not a bassist and mostly follow what I can. Maybe I'll get it worked out for this one. For some reason I've always liked my words on this tune.

Thanks again

Just wanted to say that I posted an update to this tune. I'm still working on it and it's still ruff. Maybe I can get some vox added in the future. There are two versions posted right now.

The link is in the first post in this thread.  And the new info. on the newer version can be found in the first post in this thread. Thanks for taking the time,

Bobby - Serious Noize!