1st mastered mix of set- is this gonna work?

Firstly I like the track.
I did download and listened using Soundforge Pro 11, the True Peak Meters showed you as being over by 1.2dB on the right and 0.1dB on the left across the tune ans a whole.  I did wonder if it was perhaps just a little bright as well but generally the mix sound very well balance with good spread and separation with enough space around the instrumentation and the vocal.

NIce mix. Makes me rethink some of mine.

Oh~ nice song! cool sound!

OK. I listened in my car coming home and now in my studio. Your song and playing is really so great. 
For the mix, it is good but could be better. 
I surfed around and came up with Rush's Tom Sawyer here (remastered by somebody):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gztabfs5ngA
Not to compare to you bat but it really has good top to bottom. I am A/B ing your song and their YouTube. I have you on my left monitor so I can play/pause and Rush on the right. So with my speakers jacked up, I can really compare. 
They have more low end and it is tight and big. Compare their kick and bass to yours. You use brighter guitars which is good but they sound bigger IMO because the guitars are not as bright as the vocal and cymbals. 
So, it makes the sound seem larger. 
I think you can get more out of your lo mids and bottom if you feel like it. 
Rush's kick is really nice. 
So that's some input that might help. 
At this stage, like I said one up, I would not focus too hard until all the tunes are done. I would also suggest using other commercial releases for your comparison instead of your own just to stay in the commercial playing field. 
 
All the best. 
Jimmy
 
Update: Here's another YT track:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-tP5j6yONVE
 
Kick is pretty loud but it all sounds good to me. 
 

Rimshot
OK. I listened in my car coming home and now in my studio. Your song and playing is really so great. 
For the mix, it is good but could be better. 
I surfed around and came up with Rush's Tom Sawyer here (remastered by somebody):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gztabfs5ngA
Not to compare to you bat but it really has good top to bottom. I am A/B ing your song and their YouTube. I have you on my left monitor so I can play/pause and Rush on the right. So with my speakers jacked up, I can really compare. 
They have more low end and it is tight and big. Compare their kick and bass to yours. You use brighter guitars which is good but they sound bigger IMO because the guitars are not as bright as the vocal and cymbals. 
So, it makes the sound seem larger. 
I think you can get more out of your lo mids and bottom if you feel like it. 
Rush's kick is really nice. 
So that's some input that might help. 
At this stage, like I said one up, I would not focus too hard until all the tunes are done. I would also suggest using other commercial releases for your comparison instead of your own just to stay in the commercial playing field. 
 
All the best. 
Jimmy
 
Update: Here's another YT track:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-tP5j6yONVE
 
Kick is pretty loud but it all sounds good to me. 
 

 
you know, i've always dug rush.
big fan, but mostly of the first era, up thru permanent waves.
 
but those mixes, as good as they are, sound a bit dated to me.
i'm going a bit more modern.
i'm worried about low end translation on ALL systems, and have already found freqs that i know need taming, with my mixes...
 
the mixes are all done, only the mastering is at hand now.
 
i could roll off some of the highs, even on just the guitar tracks, and still get the clarity i want,
so if i tweak any of the mixes, i might approach it that way.
small boosts of specific kick and bass freqs, i've already done, but i could get a little more poky with it,
and bring up level a bit to make up for the carving.
 
yea, rush set the bar really high.
 
if i had that recording studio to use,
and that gear,
and that drummer.....
 
LOL
 
hey, my drummer on this project was top shelf...
i was quite happy with the performances, but not the capture.
but that, i'm afraid, i'm stuck with.

thanks shot!