Mosvalve
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3 Simple Words
This is a song my son wrote. It's in the arrangement ideas stage I guess. The drums need to be worked out and I only have the scratch vocal. All Ideas and critiques are appreciated. https://soundcloud.com/Mosvalve
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 00:21:16
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I think this has got a lot of potential.
Your on the right track. There is a part where you seem to use cymbals for a drum fill. I would change that to toms. It sounds weird to me as it is but that's purely subjective.
Nice song!!!
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 15:05:28
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this is actually kind of great. So listenable. Sweet, almost beatles like.
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Mosvalve
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 15:46:24
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Thank you for listening and your thoughts. The song is kinda raw as I'm still working things out with it. It's a bit stiff because of the drums but once I have the patterns I want then I'll actually play them.
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 17:26:32
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Sweet little tune with much potential, and a really interesting rhythm guitar tone (what was that?). It moved right along melodically and rhythmically, but I was having not the easiest time picking out all the lyrics (could be the pc speakers). Personally, not a big fan of all the "I love you's," but maybe that's just me being hard on a tune that seemed to be excelling in so many other ways. Also, and this could be a taste thing, I would have liked to have heard a 'fatter, fuller' sound on the lead break around 2:10. All that stuff aside, I really liked it, and think you've got a winner there with a bit more work.
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blipp
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 17:37:24
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This does indeed show promise and has potential. The arrangement is good too and it is a nice composition. This obviously needs improvement in the mix and production to realise it's full potential, so will be interesting to hear the finished version.
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 19:07:20
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philz
Sweet little tune with much potential, and a really interesting rhythm guitar tone (what was that?). It moved right along melodically and rhythmically, but I was having not the easiest time picking out all the lyrics (could be the pc speakers). Personally, not a big fan of all the "I love you's," but maybe that's just me being hard on a tune that seemed to be excelling in so many other ways. Also, and this could be a taste thing, I would have liked to have heard a 'fatter, fuller' sound on the lead break around 2:10. All that stuff aside, I really liked it, and think you've got a winner there with a bit more work.
Thank you for your input Phil. The rhythm is my Taylor 114ce acoustic going through my Fishman Loudbox with a sm57 mic. I guess it was the way I had everything set on the amp that made it sound like that. I thought it was different to so I kept it. The vocal is just a follow track so that's why the words weren't clear. The "I love You's" well, my son is 16yrs old what can I say. He'll learn soon enough. lol. I agree on the lead guitar. I have thought about re-doing it with a different sound so maybe I'll work on that after I have the drums worked out. Thanks again.
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/10 19:09:59
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blipp
This does indeed show promise and has potential. The arrangement is good too and it is a nice composition. This obviously needs improvement in the mix and production to realise it's full potential, so will be interesting to hear the finished version.
Thanks blipp, I can use any insight and critiques I can get. Appreciated it.
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Re:3 Simple Words
2013/03/11 13:30:02
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Bob, you're off to a good start, here. The lead guitar reminds me of the Grateful Dead, but the vocals are all yours. I'll be looking forward to hearing this piece finished.
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