A realy emotional song for me....

Hey all hows it going well I have been haven a emotional time as of late anyways I needed to release it with a song as many artists do.. just wondering what you guys think of this... the beat my boy did and I did the recording of my vocals and the mix ect.

link is in the sig

its called "You and Me"

hi tha duce,
don't know the genre all that well .
the reverse vox (?) at ) :12 obscures the first
line and doesn't really add all that much. the lyrics
at 1:00 .. i don't get really.
"hold each other through the night" .. well .. she's
married with kids ... i'm wondering how this works....
sample at 1:46 (repeated elsewhere should get re-done)
lyrics at 2:12 are nice .. it feels personal at this point and
the situation becomes more real .. it's almost hypothetical
up this point.
at 3:09 .. ' please tell me what i want to hear " this
part confuses me just as you're setting up to break up .. i'd
emote a bit more at 3:20 in .. it's almost non-chalant sounding
and i don't that was your intent.

it's a bit long .. i think you could compress it down to 3:00 and
keep the interest level up on it ......

nice beat to it ...
jeff
ps: that studio picture on your MP3 site looks like Skywalker....

ORIGINAL: Tha Duce

... well I have been haven a emotional time as of late anyways I needed to release it with a song as many artists do.. just wondering what you guys think of this...

Duce,

Hey man, it sounds like you've been going through this. I hope you can get everything worked out and that you make the right decisions.

-Ed Summers

it's hard to land a fish that's already hooked ... cast elsewhere ..
best wishes .. difficult i'm sure.
jeff

different definition of landed i guess .. remember when i said
"stay away from my daughter" on your other song ? ... stay away
from my wife ;-)

jeff

What up Duce?
I think this is one of your better tracks. We should make some more contact, but here are the comments:

Your delivery sounds more polished and well recorded.
Would sound good if that synth showed up during a verse to add a little variety.
The female vocals are a little distracting. Mixed too hot?

Without commenting on the moral implications of the content, it's good to hear a variety of subject matter. Good job!