A song for bad girls

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I don't get the trap thing, it's very much the flavour of the day, but in a day with so much available to personalise your sound, trap beats all sound the same.  I used t have an 808 and 909 emuatr in the 90's (Novatin Drumstation), but would run the output through cheap guitar pedals to create different textures. As I got into hip hop, I gt more into acoustic drums that were sampled. And the occasional analogue drum mixed in, such as a straight hi hat.  Part of me still likes analogue drum sounds, so I've been keeping an eye on FXpansions Tremor VST to go on sale. With something like that available, I can't understand why Trap beats aren't evolving. Surely pickking up the trap vibe and putting a twist on it would make a production stand out. 
 
I'm not keen no your vocals, the nasal tone was grating, and I'm not sure what effect you are trying to achieve by rapping this way, but it wasn't very listenable for me. As the reverb needs some work. I'm not sure yu'd reverb a vocal as I would, but I would go drier, and smaller. You probably want to look into how reverb and vocal prcessing is applied in your genre for ideas. 
 
The content was awful and cliche'd, so probably not going to get much positive feedback. It just makes you sound little. ****es and hoes all over the place loses it's power, if you are going use language like that, it should be more clever. In a Lyrics born rap battle track, he raps "afraid to say the ****ing f-word' the word play here is that he is using the F-word t describe the f-word". It maybe worth listening outside your genre of misogynistic foul languaged narcissistic rap for idea on making your rapping a bit mre evolved. I'm a  fan of Lyrics Born, Gift of Gab and Lateef, and their use of language, rhyming schemes, rhythmic phrasing. More lately Oddisee. I was never into Eminem, but his rhyming technique was clever. I would learn more about hw t play with this ideas, but your lyrical style is very simple. 
 

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Kamikaze
I don't get the trap thing, it's very much the flavour of the day, but in a day with so much available to personalise your sound, trap beats all sound the same.  I used t have an 808 and 909 emuatr in the 90's (Novatin Drumstation), but would run the output through cheap guitar pedals to create different textures. As I got into hip hop, I gt more into acoustic drums that were sampled. And the occasional analogue drum mixed in, such as a straight hi hat.  Part of me still likes analogue drum sounds, so I've been keeping an eye on FXpansions Tremor VST to go on sale. With something like that available, I can't understand why Trap beats aren't evolving. Surely pickking up the trap vibe and putting a twist on it would make a production stand out. 
 
I'm not keen no your vocals, the nasal tone was grating, and I'm not sure what effect you are trying to achieve by rapping this way, but it wasn't very listenable for me. As the reverb needs some work. I'm not sure yu'd reverb a vocal as I would, but I would go drier, and smaller. You probably want to look into how reverb and vocal prcessing is applied in your genre for ideas. 
 
The content was awful and cliche'd, so probably not going to get much positive feedback. It just makes you sound little. ****es and hoes all over the place loses it's power, if you are going use language like that, it should be more clever. In a Lyrics born rap battle track, he raps "afraid to say the ****ing f-word' the word play here is that he is using the F-word t describe the f-word". It maybe worth listening outside your genre of misogynistic foul languaged narcissistic rap for idea on making your rapping a bit mre evolved. I'm a  fan of Lyrics Born, Gift of Gab and Lateef, and their use of language, rhyming schemes, rhythmic phrasing. More lately Oddisee. I was never into Eminem, but his rhyming technique was clever. I would learn more about hw t play with this ideas, but your lyrical style is very simple. 
 

 

 
 That was really great advice with solid examples of how someone interested in that can improve.  Too bad its all wasted on that wanna-be juvenile delinquent.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Don't care for the lyrics, but I do like the distortion/saturation on the bass line.  What's your technique?

Hugh Mann
You guys are way too nice. Way nicer than this putz deserves.  I guarantee the only talent there is from the producers that made the loops he uses.  The technique to achieve the sounds and mix?  lol.  Its already built in to the loops.  I don't understand encouraging this loser.  Whatever.

Godda say just seen this comment from H/M ... an' totally agree, Won't make comment on the work as I'm not sure I'm comfortable with a judgment 

I try to keep the lines of communication open, barring getting beaten up or killed.

FYI  in case anyone is confusing me with this cat, it is not me.
 
i am jesse q. screed, and only jesse q. screed

I love this hate from all ya losers. Keep em coming cause I'm still going to be making hits for ya.

Why I need to be thankful. No body here helped made this song. This is what I like when I make a good song people like you want to take the credit for somthing that you didn't do.

Hugh Mann

drma173
Why I need to be thankful. No body here helped made this song. This is what I like when I make a good song people like you want to take the credit for somthing that you didn't do.

You are unintentionally hilarious.  I'm a nice guy, so I'll give it one last shot. 
 
The reason you need to be thankful is that the best part of your 'music' is the loops you use.  Your 'rapping' and lyrics (the parts you actually made),  are very weak compared to pros (or anyone really. I can rap better than you, lol). 
 
As far as taking credit?  What the hell are you smoking, son?  That fake weed?  seems like it.  Its messing with your brain, cause i would not take credit for your crap, lol. 
 
You are operating under the delusion that you are very good and are making 'hits'.  you are not.  its crap. Anyone that remotely listens to rap can see your delivery is weak.  So weak.  Its really terrible dude.  You would be laughed out of any professional situation.  So you need to improve.  A lot.  You have tons of competition out there.  And they are all way better than you.  So you need to be thankful and listen to the critiques that are trying to help you improve.  You get it?  I know you don't and I just wasted my time.  So again,  I bid you adieu. 

FIRST OF ALL red neck SPAZSI DONT DO DRUGS. second of all I don't give a **** about rap competition. 3rd and last No one is better than me.... Or anyone is better than anybody. YOU JUST MAD BECAUSE A KID LIKE ME IS getting plays more than you!