Angry Girl - Help me fix this *&%?! song!

First, you should at least try to tell us why you think there is a problem.    
 
From what I hear, everything is fine except the vocals. And the claps. The vocals are hard to hear clearly because of some effect on them. And the lead vocal is a little too crispy. Then the BGV are right on top of the lead vocal as well. Pan the BGV left and right, bring the lead more up front.
 
The claps just sound weird. Try a better sample. Maybe pan them to the left with a very small delay panned right. Or vice versa, lol.
 
Cool song though!
 
Regards,
Dan

dcumpian
First, you should at least try to tell us why you think there is a problem.    
 
From what I hear, everything is fine except the vocals. And the claps. The vocals are hard to hear clearly because of some effect on them. And the lead vocal is a little too crispy. Then the BGV are right on top of the lead vocal as well. Pan the BGV left and right, bring the lead more up front.
 
The claps just sound weird. Try a better sample. Maybe pan them to the left with a very small delay panned right. Or vice versa, lol.
 
Cool song though!
 
Regards,
Dan

Thanks so much for the kind words, Dan. I guess as the writer and performer of the song it's hard to separate what I wanted when I set out to write it from what it ends up being and I'm dealing with a little cognitive dissonance as a result. lol
 
I agree about the crispiness of the lead vocal and I'll try the separation idea. The handclaps do sound weird, but they aren't samples, it's actually me clapping. Maybe I should have used samples but it never occurred to me to look for some. Do you know where I can get them?
 
Thanks!
 

Actually I like the hand clapping. Brighten it up put some reverb on it. Make it snap. Sorry I think it belongs there. But what do I know. Great guitar playing. I like that song.
PS You definitely need to bring up the vocals a little.

I've posted an updated mix based on your feedback, thanks for the help so far!
 
Updated Mix:
https://soundcloud.com/kevin-ibsen/angry-girl-v2-1

Hey, thanks Dan, I appreciate you coming back! You've been such a help that I think I'm going to have to start paying you. And who knew recording hands clapping was such a science? Thanks again!

I like the song and the mix sounds good hear. However, I agree with Dan on the hand claps. Take some lower middle out of them and take them down 1dB.
Good stuff though mate.

bayoubill
2nd mix is very good. Great song. Go with you instincts on the mix. I wouldn't change it now. There are  ALWAYS tweeks to be made in your mind so decide on the mix YOU like and go with that. Make the decision! The song and you sound great

Thank you! I don't have a very good track record from following my instincts, lol. I appreciate you taking the time, bill.

daryl1968
I like the song and the mix sounds good hear. However, I agree with Dan on the hand claps. Take some lower middle out of them and take them down 1dB.
Good stuff though mate.

Thanks for your time, Daryl, definitely going to give that a try. Appreciate it!

emeraldsoul
I listened to the second mix only. You are done. Great song, great mix!
 
The chorus vocals towards the end sounded a little warbly? wow and fluttery? I assume this is an intended effect . . . but if not, it's like the last minute of the song.
 
Or my internet connection is providing the flutter?
 
super cool, you have excellent separation all the way through.
 
-Tom

Thanks for chiming in, Tom! I had to redo almost all the vocals because of an unfortunate bounce that applied a bunch of icky effects in ways that confused the hell out of me to the point that it was easier to start over with them. I guess I missed some.  
 
Thanks for sniffing those out, I guess I ain't done after all!

Bert Guy
Kevin,
 
Real good & punchy pop-rock number. Good terse songwriting, MarshalCrenshawesque. Great instramental parts and guitar break. 
 
My only crits (I'm listening on medium-fi mono) are that the snare is too sharp/loud most of the way with the lead vocal relatively subdued (compressed?). This could be a matter of personal taste.
 
Nonetheless, real good stuff.
 
Cheers,
 
Bert
 

Bert, thanks for that. I've not tried to listen in mono, I'll have to give that a listen to see what's up with that. It's funny, I juiced the high end on the snare and dropped it a few db's, so it may be that I need to drop the high end a bit on the snare. Thank you for your kind words on the tune itself and for taking the time to check it out!

Thanks steve! Do you have any suggestions on a sample library with a good clap? I'm clueless about sampling.

lol, thank you for listening, Leizer. I appreciate you taking the time to listen and to comment.

Only listened to version 2 which works well here.  Thanks for sharing.

dcumpian
Kevin,
 
If you have A version of Komplete, I think there is a small set of claps in the default Kontakt library. They are classified under "Urban", or something like that. Otherwise, there are a few Kontakt libraries I've run across that are inexpensive with things like claps, shakers and tambourines.
 
There is also this: http://99sounds.org/vst-plugins/
 
Regards,
Dan

Dan, thanks for the pointers, I'll definitely check the 99sounds thing out, it looks like it could be very useful. I don't have Komplete, don't know a thing about it. Looks like I have some reading to do. Thanks!

Mesh
I only listened to V2 Kevin and this is a very catchy tune.....nicely performed......a hint of T-Rex (guitar). Mix sounded fantastic on my H-phones......keep em coming mate!!!  

Mesh, thanks for checking it out, and thanks for the comments. I haven't listened to T-Rex in years and years, I'm going to have to give them a listen again soon. Thanks!