Arrows-Remix 5/19

Here is a song that I wrote about a month ago and is now begging to be heard.  I did all the parts except bass guitar, which was played by my longtime friend, Roger Fife.  It's kind of a quirky look at falling in love.  I've listened to this song so many times that I've lost perspective, and I'm hoping that you all can give me some needed guidance.  Thanks to all in advance for your help.
 
It can be found here: http://www.soundclick.com...ongid=13568367&q=h
 
 

Very cool Lynn.
The delayed guitar brings George Harrison to mind which ain't a bad thing. Love the oohs too.
Can't comment on the mix as I was listening through my phone. Will listen again on better speakers later.

Lots to enjoy in this Lynn, I liked it a lot, a well written song. Cool phrasing on the lead guitar fills!

Great tune Lynn!  Well written and played.  I like the intro a lot.  Vocals sound good.  

Thanks to all who've replied!  The panning of the instruments was my big question, too, and there seems to be a consensus that the guitar is panned too wide.  My goal was to balance the synth in the right channel with the guitar in the left channel.  The guitar is 85% left and the synth is 70% right, but I'll bring the guitar in to 70% left when I remix this.  Great ears, everybody!
 

Plenty of fun here, Lynn. Focusing on the lead vocal, I really like the weird delay thing on it. The delay seems to spread out to the edges. I would be tempted to bump the level of the main vocal up, I think it could leap out from the mix a little more, for intelligibility. But I'd keep those vocal delays the volume they are, for if they get louder as well, it might swamp the mix.
 
I think this is your best vocal performance by far, and one of your most interesting mixes. Colin Hay eat your heart out.
 
well done!
 
-Tom

Great song Lynn, very catchy!
 
Here would be my suggestions, take them for whatever they're worth*
 
The synth on the right - pan it in around half of what it is.  It's pulling the mix to the one side and a bit distracting.
The bass seems to be masking the kick (which sounds great in the places where the bass stops).  Maybe run a High-pass filter on the bass to separate the two instruments.
Maybe duplicate those oooh vocals and put on some heavy reverb?
 
It's really good as it stands, but to me those are changes I'd make.
 
 
*currently around $2 cheaper than a small coffee.

What a great song, Lynn! The vocals, both the lead and the harmonies, are just excellent! The lead guitar playing is also super good.
 
In fact, all of the instruments come across full and hearty and the overall sound and feel are full of life. (The panning issue that's already been covered is just a minor mixing adjustment.)
 
Of everything, the lead vocal and those yummy background harmonies are my favourites. You are so talented, Lynn ... it's a real pleasure to listen to your work. Thanks!
 
LJ
 
  P.S. On listening to your second link, the remix, the whole thing sounds even better :)
 

Matt, I'm really impressed that you put so much thought into this,and it gave me some food for thought;)  Thanks for taking the time.
 
Freddy, it's always good to hear your kind words.  Thanks a million!
 
Laura, I appreciate that you listened a second time and your comments.  To be honest, I wasn't sure if I liked this song myself, but I'm starting to gain confidence in it.
 
Lester, thanks for taking the time to listen and comment!
 
 

You had me at "REAL GUITARS BEING PLAYED!".   
 
Enjoyed hearing this one very very much!!!!  I would just add some treble and a little less bass on everything in all honesty.  But that's a personal preference I guess. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed hearing this one very much!!!
 
 
 

First of all fine job!
Once you have solid performances, so much of production and mixing is "personal" taste.
I think Dan was giving you good advise, vis-a-vis, double tracking the rhythm guitar.
I would say certainly in the intro, and pan the synth to the center, maybe the synth gets a bit of verb
to pull it back some, as the slide comes in.
Once the verse starts, its really all about your gut instinct.
The synth changes and then at the chorus the piano comes in; no need for the guitar to be spread then.
On my phone I thought the slide on the "call and response" with the vocal was a little "hot".
On my Bose cans I really didn't notice it, but the bass (on the Bose cans) seemed a bit too much.
I thought it was masking the whole kit, not just the kick.
Nicely done!
Tom