BUMPED for feedback, needed for this

http://soundcloud.com/brokdnb/lotus  
 
Bump for advice/input
It is my daughters newest song. She is concerned that the sub may be too loud and is concerned about the vocal level and is interested in anything you have to say. She had to mix with headphones due to circumstances. I don't even have a sub and my monitors are not up right now.
 
Any more help?? Please... (thanks Bapu)
 
I will forward this link to her so she can get feedback. Thanks in advance.
 
Julien and Becky

Thanks Bapu. It sounds fine on my phones but I don't have my monitors up, I had to move 'em.

Julien

Why wont this bump??? Sheesh... it still only shows 2 responses...

J

BTW: When will you post something?

 
I'm trying... drums are still a mystery to me.... (I know, excuses excuses)
 
Thanks for the input. I don't know if she has signed up here yet but I asked her to. I really appreciate you and your help! She told my yesterday that she liked your music. I pointed her to you and to Ben. I hope anyone who listens and has an opinion will chime in.

I;m listening now on cans. 

The bass sounds good.... the song is not a genre I listen to often. The drums are very repetitious. Maybe thats the style. 

Over all the song gets better to me as it goes.  I was a bit taken back by the bass to start but now as the song is developing, it works. 

Not a bad mix overall. I could not hear the words clearly, but I suspect that's how it's supposed to be. 

Good job to her. 

Hi Mariush,

Thanks a lot for your feedback. Ill take your advice and turn the bass down a bit. I have KRK5 but like my Dad said, I do a lot in the headphones, and then every little bit listen to it on the speakers. After posting the MP3 I listened to it really loudly and backed up a bit and noticed the floors shaking. The advice and the mids I will also take into thought, I really dont have much experience with developing low range subs, but i will try reducing the mids to see what happens.

As far as the vocals, do you mean the actual vocal line where I am singing, or this "heya, heya, heya" which repeats over and over?

Thanks GH Im happy to hear your feedback too, Im glad that even though its not your style and had a slow start, that it won you over a little bit anyway. :-) Because I come from drum'n bass electronic dance music background, you can hear a lot of infleunce in there (repetative drums) and darker heavy basses. I normally have intros and bring bass sounding lines in later in the song but since that bass sound that is already in at the beginning was at first my favorite element, i thought why not just have it in at the very beginning. :-)

I really appreciate you guys taking the time to listen to my track and give Feedback.

Take care,
Becky

Becky you need to post your newer song on soundcloud... I like it. I forwarded you a message there from someone else that has a lot of technical advice.

Talk to you later.
Dad

Sounds good to me.  Repetitive, as much of this genre seems to me sometimes.  I like it when the vocals are in, it breaks it up.  I'm also listening on Sennheisers and it sounds pretty darned good.

Would like to be able to know what the words are being sung.
Good beat! Nice choice of sound layers.

Thanks everyone kindly for the listen and the feedback, taking it all into mind. hope to have time again on the weekend to put all of this advice into place... unfortunately day job takes up all my time in the week. but i guess something has to fund the hobby. :-)