Bella Luna~ re-sung and tweaked with your help...thanks :)

I did some fixin' and lowered some noisy things, and got rid of most of the cricket sounds... This is a kind of love song to a young woman full of beauty and way too much self hate.
 
 
Thanks for the listen.
 
 Bella Luna
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=826274&songID=11083634 :)

Yeah.  It's different.  Probably too different for this neck of the woods :) I appreciate the ears and honesty.  Good to get a response.  

Hello Philip..........Thanks for response! I guess it's rough ...I'll mess around a bit more with it tonight. I'm happy you liked the vocal. I'm never sure about those things. Yeah, that's a pic of me on a good day. Thanks very much for your vivific comments.

I listened to Bella Lunna... it's different ... kinda like a Cirque Du Solei meets German caberet ....  

Not the typical RG's kind of tune.  


I still liked it due to it's uniqueness. 

I had to go and revisit a few of your older ones.  Really enjoyed Hard Left Turn. 

didnt dig the intro, for me it was too pitchy and it was stretching the time signature a little too much...

having said that I really enjoyed it when the backing synth came in half way through the song became more structured and the melody stronger.

I thought the mix was bang on.

And there is emotion put in to the song which is always the most important.

Dude dont take my opening comments to heart, I do not listen or enjoy indie music and write soppy sickly pop instead so take that as you will.

Great, work

Cian

Cian.................It is very sparse and pitchy.  It's good to hear that it's not working at the intro.  I'll revamp with more vocals per Manny's idea.  Thank you for coming by to listen!

Manny..............Man, those are some remarkable names you mention...i love that stuff and am flattered to be in the same paragraph! :)
Your vocal idea is brilliant!  Brilliant i say.  I'll work it up and let you know if i can pull it off.  Thank you for your support and friendly ears. 

This sounds so much like everything I hear today (NOT!) :-)

I'm not sure how much I like the "heavy" tremolo, but then again? I've always been a little shaky when it comes to tremolo? The upright is an interesting touch. While it was better than Bella Mouth (that monster hit from Deliverance) it wasn't my favorite wreckless tune. 

This is the best thing I have ever heard from you. Great singing, atmospheric yet with a signature RG melody. I would be quite proud of this.  Cool quirk.

Rick, It's an interseting tune. I can easily imagine this ending up on the sound track for some movie. I don't feel that the recording is really doing the song any justice at the moment. I think that if you put some more thought and time into it, it could be much better. Some crits: (and as always, just my opinion, subjective and subject to being wrong):
 
Ditch the piano (or any other instrument) in the first verse. Let your voice carry it. You have a great voice. There's no reason to be shy, and this is the perfect spot to let it shine a bit. It will let the song build.
 
I don't care for the delay on the piano. I think I understand what you're going for, but it isn't working. Maybe (just maybe) it would work if the timing was better. I'm not a big fan of perfect timing, but there is a fine line between perfect timing and raw. Too raw is not good.
 
Lyrically (as uasual for you ), the song is very solid. I have only one crit: "Your fragile kiss my soul Elixir"... After listening to the song a couple of times, this line still sticks out like a sore thumb. Yes, it's 'on target', but it just doesn't 'fit' with the rest of the lyrics. Just my opinion.
 
That's my thoughts on this. I'm no rocket scientist or musical superstar, so take it for what you think it's worth. I think it's a great little tune. It just needs a little TLC.

Vicente.............Thank you for the listen and comments...I'm glad you liked!
 
bandontherun.........I'm hearing from a lot of folks that perhaps the tremelo is too much. I'm grateful for this feedback. Thank you for listening.
 
James..............big happy smiles over here. Thank you for that! :)
 
James............I'm elated you dig it. Wasn't sure if i'd slipped off the edge of the pier. Thank you for listening and the shot in the arm.
 
 Hello Wook...........Thank you kindly!
 
 Darin..........Always nice to hear from you:) Very helpful comments. I will pull back piano at 1st verse and try it without the tremolo. I will try to have it up tomorrow. Thank you!
 
Guitarpima......... I'm so glad the song is working. I will try these helpful ideas and hear how it goes. Thank you for stopping in to listen and leave the kind comments.

Wow Rick... What a world of difference those changes made.. Love it just the way it is! Even the one line that didn't sit well with me upon first listen, seems perfectly fine now (oops..). I think this may very well become my new favorite Reckless Gents tune. Very solid writing, and very unique. Much impressed!
 
By the way, it's good to finally see that mug of yours. :)

Very different, very different!! I would consider doing the vocals over again, but this time, but your deepest heart and soul into it and keep it as solid as cobalt steel. Some of the vocal lines just seem to get lost for me and I'm positive you can nail it. It is agreat start for what it is, but something like this, you have to nail it or it just doesn't work. Sing it like your at an interview to get this piece on a theactrical stage with a big major production company and there is a panel of judges sitting there to give their response.

You asked for help, so I am just being honest from a listeners point and not trying to make you feel good, but rather want you to win the race for the part in the play. Heart and soul is all it needs and you will have a winner. Find the right depth in your vocals for every line and you can't loose with this one. Being different and way out there, it needs to stand tall and on the money.

Just trying to be helpful and honest, now go give it your best.

Blessings, John

The song makes me smile, as always. Quirky and original and well-done. I always love to hear you play the piano, but this time, something about the sound of it isn't doing it for me. (the bass part of it). But take that with a huge grain of salt! :) Glad to hear you playing and making music again.

Wow Rick, I didn't get a chance to hear the version you deleted either, but this was truly fantastic. The lyrics are genius as is the accompanying music.

This might be my new favourite of yours.

Love it!

Mark.

This is so much better. There is still a clip at 2:47 into 2:48. It's either a clip or "clip" in your tracks that needs attention. I get noises like that sometimes when clips start. I just zoom in and adjust the crossfade till it stops.

The mix is great!