"Broken Angel" (Power Ballad)

"Broken Angel" (Power Ballad)
 
Hi, guys,
 
I just uploaded a test mix for a new song called "Broken Angel".  This one was really a bit different than usual for me because instead of writing it on guitar, like 99.9% of my stuff, I wrote this one on the piano.
 
If you have three minutes to check it out, as always, any and all helpful comments, suggestions, constructive criticism, input and ideas are welcome, and also greatly appreciated!

Thanks in advance for any observations, suggestions, comments and ideas!
Bob
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"Broken Angel"
 
128kbps MP3 on SoundClick at: http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12037146

Or...

Better Quality MP3 on the Player at: http://www.boboister.com/test-mixes.html
 
Thanks!

Using a different instrument to write, from what you normally use, sure has the ability to open new doors.

This sounds good Bob. Since it's a test mix I assume you have slightly more work to do. But it sounds good at this point too.

Good work so far Bob... this will be another winner for you...

Hey Bob, great job as always.

Wow top rocks Bob.
I agree the bass drum is a bit out of touch with the band.
Great guitars.
The vox seems to be flanged or chorused at times and it throws me off a bit thinking there is a pitch thing happening.
a very pro mix overall.
Thanks for sharing.

So rarely do I get to comment on a test mix of yours. It is very polished sounding already, though I might carve out more space for the bass and low toms. Bob, please take the following for what its worth, which is very little: You have a distinctive vocal mix style. I would like to see you change it. Carve out less lows on it, use less effect (or a warmer mike). You have a fantastic voice, don't be afraid to show it, and maybe begin to challenge it a bit. - Cheers, Shad.

Hey Bob, nice job on this! Pretty solid for a test mix. Kick drum seemed a bit loud to me, but other than that, sounding good so far. Can't wait to hear this all done! :)

-Danny

Excellent piano intro Bob, makes a great break from the usual crunchy guitar (That is radio friendly without doubt).

Very strong melodically, actually one of your strongest and has a little more laid back pop feel about this (Similar to sum 41 - pieces).

Sweet guitar solo.

Since its a draft I'm gonna say two things and I don't care if you use them or not, this thing is in anthem as is;

(1) I would change the kick sound, I think it sounds too metal for this particular song (and the drums do need tightening as others have said). I would maybe even consider some subtle changes to distinguish it from your other drum tracks, like using more toms on the main beat etc

(2) I think you should change the melody notes of "broken angel" to a more major chord, sounds a bit cold and sinister (metal rock sounding) more so cos the rest of the song is popish and "warm" ,I think it would fit better.  I don't know what key this is in, I'm not near an instrument, but I would use the major chord instead of the minor one on those words, from ear it sounds like the root chord in whatever keys its in (chord at 0:07).

Either way, its gonna rock. You asked for advice and thats what I would suggest :-). Good stuff Bob as always, this one is worth the effort.

Cian

Bob,
 
Really catchy tune, I like what you have done with the piano.    My only suggestions would be to tame the kick.   I think it is a little busy in parts and the song to me is more pop oriented, the nail in the kick metal sound (to me my ears)   sounds a bit out of place with the rest of the song.  Add another harmony vocal to the chorus and you have a top 40 hit on your hands.    Really fine song.  
 
Regards

All mix comments aside, I LOVE IT! The piano adds a nice touch and the guitars come in just right. One small nit though...the harmonies at the end go into minor when your piano chords are major.