Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath

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Moe Shinola
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2013/08/03 17:27:10 (permalink)

Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath

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Hope everyone enjoys this. It's my partner Kai's tribute to her Mother-in law, who passed last year. That's Kai doing the spoken word near the end. Fiddler John Atherton does the solo violin. It's me and MIDI on everything else. Done in Sonar 8.5 PE.

"Every man's ME is the dullest part of him."
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    theguitarplayer
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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/03 22:35:49 (permalink)
    Tributes are always nice to do, and the loss of a loved one is always frustrating and confusing as they will be missed. The song is nice but maybe just needs a thing or two with the mix. Maybe a soft knee, a bit of compression and final it out with some limiting. You decide, but try and keep the vocals up front the best you can.
     
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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/05 19:32:32 (permalink)
    Mix needs more space. Except for the drums, everything sounds like it is right down the middle. Drums are very thin sounding. Your voice is fine, and the guitar is present, if a touch brittle. With a few tweaks, this would be fine!
     
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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/06 16:21:02 (permalink)
    I like the vocal in this because it has raw emotion, much like some of Neil Young's early songs.  What I like about listening to your songs is that I never know what I'll get.  I like being surprised.  Nice tribute.

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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/08 11:21:22 (permalink)
    Hi Joe, nice tribute, the spoken word passage could be a bit louder imho. I'm not a fan of the violin solo's tuning and timing, sorry.
     
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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/08 15:34:04 (permalink)
    Rikkie
    Hi Joe, nice tribute, the spoken word passage could be a bit louder imho. I'm not a fan of the violin solo's tuning and timing, sorry.
     
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    I understand. the fiddler I work with is great at knowing lots of old-timey tunes but not so good at improvising. I had to splice that together. I think I did a miracle considering what he left me to work with.

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    Re: Cheryl's Song, by One Deep Breath 2013/08/08 21:08:23 (permalink)
    My first exposure to your music. I liked this. The tribute was fitting. 

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