"City visit" - With Lyrics (little different drums)

Just a note on the side to say you appeared to get a couple of duplicate posts so they have been removed.

As for your song, well not a singer my self so no comment on the vocal performance but the recording does sound a bit little like they were recorded in a box perhaps a little over compressed or a bit more top/air in the mix for them.  
 
For me the tune feels like it could do with a little more development and arrangement, perhaps a breakdown or a middle 8 just to add some variation.  Will keep the furry ears out for any updates you might consider.

When you warn that you're 'not much of a singer' I expect the worst.  But really, your singing is fine -- you have much more fluidity in your phrasing and emotion in your tone than you might imagine (more than many of the old-hand stalwarts on this forum if truth ever was told). You convey a sense of emotion that is appropriate to this song -- nostalgia, longing, etc.  I get what you're after in this DEMO and you achieved it.  I kept thinking how a good Euro producer could -- with a beefed-up arrangement and vocals harmonies added to your vocal -- could make this commercial, yet still maintain the artistic sense of the song.  And, I like the chord changes that you have here as well as other touches (like the guitar lines) -- but the drums, as you probably know, need more flexibility.  All in all, you have much to work with -- any way you can get a producer to take notice?
 
Allan
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I find my self agreeing with Allan again but on a different song --- this one.  Your vocals sound very good.  The tone of this vocal performance has a bit of a John Lennon sound and would lend itself to some harmonies (probably high harmonies).  You don't oversell (a pet peeve of mine) the song but your style definitely demonstrates a melancholy that matches the lyrics.
 
Nice one!!!

The guitar sounds are great...and it sounds kind of "Bowie-esque" to me...
Nice!