Como un lunar (Like a birthmark)

Dear forum people,

This is a lesser known song of Alvaro Carrillo, author also of "La Mentira" known in English as "Yellow Days", and many, more great songs...Humble composer who, as such, met death in an tragic car accident, as his traveling from city to city was often done  in his own small car.

That somber day, he was traveling with his wife and children. Only 2 of the children survived. They are adults already.

"Como un lunar" translates to "Like a birthmark".

It is a great theme about forgiveness.

The story is about a having-done-wrong loved one being told "come back to me, we all can carry a stain, ... like a birthmark. Don't worry about what others say..Those are terrible people, excessively good...They don't understand..They seem to forgive, but are always condemning others.. Much more than your faults, is worth, one single thread of your hair." 

I hope I can translate this song someday into English, to match its music, and the theme.
 
Uses a jazz ballad rhythm, played at once on two keyboards, improvising Piano, Organ, and Saxophone (which I rarely do). The vocals I did re-do, as well as due Sonar audio adjustments, most based on what I have been learning from this great forum.

VERSION NOW CORRECTED as per forum members suggestions:

http://www.soundclick.com...857&songID=9414093

Thank you for any suggestions on how to improve.  If you happen to like it, the effort will not have been in vain.

Dear people,

I have completely replaced this song with a very different and complete version and arrangement.

It now is a jazz-ballad rhythm with improvised sax, piano, and organ.

I would very much appreciate feedback on how to improve.

I hope it is not too bad, .... and even that you might like it.

Thank you.

I really like the song.   Vocals are fine.  Organ sounds great. Mix needs some tweeking.  Bring vox up front, turn down the delay on the drums,  Put an eq on the master buss and experiment with brightening it up slightly.
Very nice song.

Hi again good people,

I have already corrected the above song as suggested.

Toned down the organ, brought up the vocals, did some mix adjustments, and added hardware equalization from the sound card.

A check to see if it there was improvement would be much appreciated.

Thanks!

Thank you paulo for listening and taking the time to comment.

I will rest the song as is for a while and then later do apply a different organ tone or even substitute it for something else. This last time I just did not want to leave empty space there, so I just lowered its volumes.

Since this are my first attempts into putting out something complete, and to put it out for being checked, I am very appreciative of the suggestions offered.

I really like the song and I love your vocal.

At times the instruments don't seem focused but,

IMO it adds to the overall vibe of the recording

which I like a lot.