Freddy J
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Day's End
Here is a kinda jazzy vocal number that I wrote with my wife in mind. Again, as far as style, I am wandering away from my comfort zone but I one has to try something new once in a while --- doesn't one?!? Since I am out of my zone, I would appreciate any comments, suggestions, crit's, etc. Thanks! Day's End http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=963481
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/05 04:56:29
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This is a nice song. I'd like to be sipping a mai tai and watching the sun set in some warm place while hearing your tune. It reminded me of Michael Franks (remember popsicle toes?). Evidently, he's teaching music at the college level these days.
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/05 11:02:58
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Cool jazz for sure! Very laid back compared to most of your songs. I found it to be relaxing. Nice work!
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/05 15:14:15
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Cool tune Freddy...slinky! 
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/05 18:04:08
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Cool grooving Freddy. A little different for your normal but still good.
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/05 20:27:30
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I like it!
Guitars are a little "dry" for me; its your mix...
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/07 22:29:17
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Hello my good friend freddy j,
nice tune. personally I think you should sing this in a little higher register, kind of in a loud whisper, but with authority. I just hear that in my head. maybe you don't think you can't do that? what the hey, give it a try, if you have time. I think it would be a very cool departure.
no arguing the guitar tone at 2:15
very cool around 2:35, very muchchuch, the guitar interplay is what I mean.
sounds good over the ol laptop speakers.
thanks
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Freddy J
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/08 22:04:34
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Thank you David - I appreciate the comments. Thanks also for putting me on to Michael Franks. He does some interesting stuff. I had to look on-line for the meaning intended in popsicle toes. There seems to be a diversity of opinion but it is a cool song. Thanks again.
Hi Scott. Thanks for listening and taking the time to comment. I appreciate the kind words.
Hi James. I appreciate the kind words. Slinky -- I have been trying for that in a few numbers that I have given up on (for the time being) and I'm thrilled that I kinda got there with this number. Thanks!
Hey my furry friend. I appreciate your taking time to listen and comment. Every once in a while I have to go in a different direction and I'm glad that it worked out this time.
Thanks Tom! I appreciate the input. I did put just a slight touch of reverb on the guitar panned left but I was going for a bit of a vintage sound. I even used my semi-hollow body guitar for the other 2 tracks and pumped it into the computer straight in an effort to get that effect. Oh well, what is it that they say about the road to somewhere being paved with good intentions? ;>)
Jesse - Thanks buddy! I get what you are saying about the vocals but this is rainy season in Florida and for me that is rotten sinus time. I definitely could not get to the high notes during this time of year. Maybe I'll try again when fall or winter (oops, I forgot --- Florida claims not to have a winter season) comes around. ;>) Thanks again for the input!!
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kevinwal
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/09 06:24:39
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Hey, Freddy, cool & smooth! Love the guitar tones! I kind of agree with sliding this baby up maybe a half-step but it's good the way it is. It's a nice song with a great feel and I like your voice a lot.
Here are some nits:
I couldn't hear the kick drum, was there one? If there was it would help pull the bass part in quite a bit. As it is the bass feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the rhythm parts (guitar and drums). I listened to Spooky Woman Blues too (which I liked very much, nice work) and noticed that you did a great job with the rhythm section on that one. I'd take those principles and apply them to this tune if it were me. I also noticed the confidence of the vocals on Spooky Woman Blues that made it really swing, and which seems to be muted here.
Jazz is just Blues in a tuxedo I think. :)
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/11 00:10:36
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Very smooth and silky sound, Kenny -- I enjoyed this -- you did a great job with the recording too -- a cohesive mix -- cool vocal, too. !! -- Allan
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/11 18:00:12
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Hey Freddy! nice work here. mix is a little muddy sounding, vox sound a lot more up front than the rest of the instruments (no or too little verb?) I agree with Jesse, I think I'd like to hear this a little higher register, but whether he meant this or not, I'd say bring the key up a half step or two.
nice guitar solo
drums sound a little "distant" - needs some clarity on them.
overall great sounding song! I think the mix could use a little work, but it's already a good start!
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/11 20:39:22
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Every time I visit the forum, you always have something new. Your output will surpass Bach one day. This is only a step off your usual thing, but you know I'm a big fan, so keep crankin' 'em out. And it's lawya a good idea to get your wife into the occasional song.
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Freddy J
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/17 18:54:24
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Hi Kevin. Thanks for listening and the great suggestions. I will make an effort to bring it up the register on this song after "sinus season". I do most of my recording at night and this time of year, during evening hours, my voice is just a gravelly roar. I used live drum loops from Beta Monkey. There was not much bass in these brush loops but when I redo this number I will do some EQ to see if I can bring out the kick. Thanks also for listening to Spooky Woman and for the kind comments.
Hey Allan. Thanks for the kind comments -- much appreciated. BTW I commented on a recent post that you did -- very cool stuff!!!
Hey Reece. You always have good suggestions and I appreciate them. I will try on the register but can't promise that it will work ;>) I will try getting a more balanced sound out of the drums (e.g., response to Kevin above) and ya, maybe the vocals should come down -- just a bit. Thanks again!!
Thank you Mark. My output might out-do Bach (doubtful) but the quality certainly won't be matched to his ;>)
I don't want to write too many songs about my wife --- she might get a swelled head, you know. I appreciate the kind words. Thanks again!!
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/17 20:47:20
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Freddy,
Nice song and performance. Only thing I might change other than above suggestions is to EQ the right and left rhythm guitars differently. I mean leave one where it is but tweak the other one to give it a different sound. They sound too similar. Maybe put them in a different verb space so there is a clearer difference between the two rhythm guitar parts. I would probably leave the one in the right channel where it is and tweak the left channel..
Really enjoyed the song.
Regards
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kennywtelejazz
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Re: Day's End
2017/08/19 00:01:47
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Hi Freddy , Nice song man your tune has some of the typical Blues type of thing going on w the guitars ,yet the tune is playing out in a much broader genre of music style with the song structure and vocals ... Sort of like it's own genre really in a way ... Nice laid back story telling about the quality time you will get to spend with your woman after the cares of the day have played out ... I'm sure your Lady dug what you have done here musically with your tribute to her . all the best, Kenny
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