Discount PISTOLX

So Ima leave this here

https://soundcloud.com/findenzio/111a

Hi

I don't like it but honestly going by today's market -- it's the most not dated  commercially viable work currently on this forum.  

I like the creativity. You are freaking crazy great at musical lines and rhythmical rhymes. 
 
Thing is, your a really good and nice person Anthony. Knowing that, it makes it really hard for me to listen to you trying to do gangster rap style music. You should just be yourself, and not pretend to be anyone else. Talk about your REAL LIFE, not pretend. 
 
Why not do some feel good music with your own personality and just be yourself, man you ain't no gangster !?
 
I get it in a way, your a story teller, and you like the beat and all that stuff, but like I said, you ain't no gangster man.
 
Your really TALENTED and there is no need for you to act that way IN MY OPINION only, no offense meant at all, so please do not take it that way. 
 
If you ever need guitar on anything and I can help don't hesitate to ask!!!! I'll try my best my friend, just send me a PM here.
 
Take care man, I liked the music and hearing this, but I couldn't get past the fact that I know you really aren't a gangster.
 
Just my thoughts on the song my friend. 
 
Bobby
 

Needs to sound a little angrier in my opinion.  Vocal sounds a little whiny.
 
And there is not much bottom.  This genre should be working my sub and it is not.
 
Other than that, it is quite good.
 
JR

drma173
Dick

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As mentioned above, the bass is a bit wimpy. It should be popping the subs. Also, the synth playing the theme sounds a bit on the cheezy side. Maybe cut back on the vibrato or something. I also agree that the vocals are a bit whiney. Maybe try slowing down the pace of the vocals, it will help with pronunciation and make the lyrics better to understand. They blur together and it's difficult to determine what you are angry about.