Don't Let The Sun Set - new original song

Hi lovely people
Here's a song that I wrote and recorded.
Nits and crits welcome. I hope you like it.
Edit: Just for clarity
***NO LOOPS WERE USED IN THE MAKING OF THIS SONG***
 
https://soundcloud.com/skyblueproductions/dont-let-the-sun-set-1
 
Don't Let The Sun Set
Written and performed by Staypress
V1
You were a girl with an eye for the goal
You got what you wanted, you were nice on the whole
When we got together our team had won the cup
We thought we'd live forever and things were on the up
Chorus
Don't let the sun set
Cos we're not done yet
we're a pair there's no doubt
So please don't walk out
V2
I was a boy who's heart had been broken
I met you and as soon as we'd spoken
Knew you were the one but then you grew weary
You found another then wouldn't come near me
Now the game is over, it's a victory for you
Can't we go to extra time or see the season through?
Chorus

Starise
Very original feel here Daryl. Everything is mixed clean, sounds nice and is locked tighter than a pair of spandex on a sumo wrestler.
 
Excellent all round mate! 

lol
Thanks Tim
 

I love those weird sounds spread around the background.  Your songs are fun to listen to.  You never know what's going to pop up in the atmosphere.
 
John B.
 
EDIT-The "Fire"towards the end sound like an old video game from the 80s.  I think it was called "Gunslinger" or something like that.

Very Well Done Mate.
 

FoggyMindTheBand
Clever and Fun! :) I wish I could write with Synths and loops! it's amazes me how cool it can be! 

thanks a lot Foggy - no loops used in this one (or ever)

From the very open, this mix is outstanding!
 
Love that bass and the FX dropped in here and there. Another top-notch production!
 
Regards,
Dan
 

really dig this slow burn groove....
kinda makes me wish i was hanging on the beach in la jolla,
'cept for that smoke!! LOL, poor dudes down there..
 
this is really tight,
i can't really relate to tunes written around loops,
without a guitar in my hands, i'm not sure what to do!
LOL,
but this is spot on.
nice job

thegaltieribrothers
Brilliant mix - love the reggie feel to this one.
 
Great lyrics + very catchy hook.
 
Thanks for sharing.
 
Good Job!
 
paul

Thanks a lot Paul

bapu
Very Well Done Mate.
 

Thanks me old mucker

the shaker makes it. Seriously! Melody and vocals are catchy as all heck. That chugga guitar waaaaay back, very nice. I don't think a mix could be cleaner and clearer than this.
 
Way to go, Daryl!
 
-Tom

Bob Oister
Hey, Daryl,
 
You've got a very cool, modern sounding pop rocker here, with excellent writing, great playing and vocals, and a crystal clear, well textured mix!
 
I always love the clever twists and turns in your originals and the classy little extras in your mixes that help make up that trademarked tasty, very recognizable Staypress Sound!
 
Dynamite work, Daryl, top notch all the way around!
Bob

Thanks Bob. Very kind of you mate.

jamesg1213
Reggae-mungus track Dazzer, love it 

Irie
Thanks mate

batsbrew
really dig this slow burn groove....
kinda makes me wish i was hanging on the beach in la jolla,
'cept for that smoke!! LOL, poor dudes down there..
 
this is really tight,
i can't really relate to tunes written around loops,
without a guitar in my hands, i'm not sure what to do!
LOL,
but this is spot on.
nice job

Thanks a lot Bats - no loops used on this one mate and never use loops.

Wayfarer
That's a really nice song there, both the music and the lyrics. Just excellent. Perfect mix too. Vocals were great!
 
Bill

Thanks Bill. I really appreciate it.

Great tune! - Love the mix and production. Absolute top notch. Cannot fault it.
I'm getting a Gorillaz vibe from this. Your vocal is teetering on the Albarn.  Is that what you want?