Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated]

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Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated]

OK, here is the fixed version of a song I posted and then deleted because of the unpleasant harmonies. That's what happens when one rushes things

Please let me know your thoughts.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8877187

This song comprises prayers before and at the cross.

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    Martin Barret
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/13 01:34:52 (permalink)
    Hi guy! 

    Nice voice!  That's the first thing that comes to mind.  Also - message content - great! 

    Okay, now the critique - hope you don't mind. 

    1.  Extreme panning of electric & acoustics - hard left/hard right.  Too dis-associative.  The E-Guitar should maybe have two channels and the Acoustic the same - but record the acoustic with 2 different mics.  Treat the Electrics different each as well. 

    2.  Tuning.  You have some serious tuning issues in your guitars at times.  If it's a matter of intonation, that's not too hard to fix on the electric, but the acoustic - that's a little trickier.  It's now, in this generation we can actually repair individual instrument performances that way using melodyne editor.  Don't have it myself, but if you want to keep a good performance (voice/guitar/piano...whatever) you can tune the instrument's track (each note of each chord - hard to believe, I know!).  Might be out of most peoples reach/budget however. 

    3.  Your drums sound as if they are in different rooms.  The snare sounds off to the left in my headphones as well. 

    4.  Use some compression on your voice and lift it out of the mix a bit higher. 

    5.  What's with the drum-stick clicks in the solo?  Tick...tick-tick.....Tick....tick-tick?  Don't know if you intended it for timing or effect - either way, if you don't mind me saying...they gotta go.

    Please don't let all my critique discourage you.  My stuff didn't sound very together for years.  You might want to resource some 'basics of mixing' tutorials out there on the net.  They helped me tremendously.

    I look forward to more of your material though, as I have a bias to songs/the arts that promote the faith. 

    God bless,

    Martin Barret
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/13 06:30:46 (permalink)
    It is off to a great start!

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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/13 07:12:55 (permalink)
    Hi!
    the song is great,
    but in mixing, as it seems to me, there are some mistakes:
    1. about panning in intro, as it already said - very extremely. and i think, you need a double - track of acoustic guitar.
    2. i didn't like a frequency balance between kick drum and bass. kick drum sounds very weak, when it plays with bass..

    all this is IMHO, of course
    (sorry for my english), good luck!
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/13 17:43:21 (permalink)
    I think the mix sounds great and i love the thick sounds you get from the guitars, especially the acoustic, but as already mentioned, they are panned too wide apart. leaving the centre a bit too empty.

    The drums sound great too with lots of vibrancy.

    I like your vocals in this.

    Overall i think the production is wonderful, but the guitars need to be brought in from the extreme edges a little.
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/15 00:53:44 (permalink)
    I agree with the hard left guitar being brought in some.

    Nice playing.

    Ron
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/15 23:38:23 (permalink)
    Thanks to everyone for your time and responses!

    Martin, I really appreciate the effort you put in your detailed critique, this is what I like to see :) I prefer it over nice comments that don't reveal what is obvious to everyone but me!

    The extreme panning was a product of adding width at the boosting stage within Wavelab- it highly exaggerated the panning, this also explains the drums -Fixed panning

    Tuning: I always tune before and during tracking to keep intonation correct and so I soloed each instrument during playback and DID find that I had played wrong notes on the bass -twice! But as far as the guitars go, I couldn't locate any intonation issues. You may note that the acoustic is a 12 string and that may account for a bit of that? -Fixed bass notes.

    Voice compressed.

    Drums sticks -LOL! The rhythm was not pronounced as I wanted so I opted for the stick sound -Changed to cymbals just for you :)
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    Scottytunes: thanks for the encouragement :)
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    Mailman: I doubled the acoustic, slightly delayed one by 4 tics to thicken the tone- :)
    I rolled of some lows on the bass and compressed it with the drums- I see what you mean!
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    Blipp: Thanks for adding to the consensus, sometimes one wonders if it's just a matter of taste.  :)
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    Rolifer:  thanks for your kind words and like Blipp, letting me know you agree with others on needed changes.  :)


    New version uploaded. Your comments are appreciated.

    F@KER
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    Martin Barret
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/16 09:29:34 (permalink)
    Hi There.

    Yup!  That's considerably better...but.. the bass is off to the left side in my headphones!  That's great if you're going for the 60's Beatles Stereo, but bass (these days) is smack-dab in the centre with the kick. 

    At the beginning a bit, but mainly at the fade-end your e-guitar (or is it the bass?) has some single-coil hum that really sticks out.  Do you have WAVES X-Noise or Z-Noise or any other noise-elimination software plugs?  If not, pull out the offending buzzy guitar and push up the acoustic in the end fade for a tad and then re-fade it so you don't notice the pulling out of the buzzing guitar.  I've had to use that trick several times back the the 4-track days! 

    At the 23 - 40 seconds mark you still have that stick going a' tick...tick-tick.....tick....tick-tick.  Don't think you need anything other than cymbals until you start singing.  Then the musical 'natural course of events' would be to add the side-stick. 

    Your voice sits up nice in the mix now.  Good going!

    Have a listen to my latest song re the fine art of (trying to) balance a mix (and feel free to comment too :-)  ) and please use my free Home Recording Helps resources found on Box.net HERE.

    You're on your way to making some great meditative music for The Man.

    God Bless,

    Martin Barret




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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/16 10:18:28 (permalink)
    Hi Felix!  really nice song!  I like the instrumentation you've used here.  I think the vox still need to come up some in the mix.  I didn't hear them before you put a compressor on them, but they're still quite low and get overpowered in the mix.  I'm not fond of the bass in the left channel, either, I'd center it (modern stereo mixing does this). 

    I'm not hearing much of a kick in the drums, either.

    the acoustic sounds a little "muddy" or off - "not clean"

    this is a great song, tho, good vox, great playing!  excellent work so far!

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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/16 10:40:22 (permalink)
    Sounds to me like you put some serious work into this and plan to keep at it so I'd like to add that I'm listening on computer speakers and the seperation problem isn't nearly as evident, nor is the muddieness of the acoustic? Actually, at times the acoustic actually sounds very real and clear.
    The Bass, has a nice tonal quality but does appear a bit pronounced.. this could be my setup or it could be due to the panning. Vocals sound nice and intelligible. I'll try to listen on my other set up later. Great job so far

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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/17 12:42:28 (permalink)
    Thanks, Martin, Beagle and Tap. I was working on the video, which is done. So, I will now get back to doing final adjustments as per your suggestions.

    Thanks again for your support!

    BTW, video here:   http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BupP_1dUW08

    (It's a tricky thing getting the levels right on my system, then on puter speakers, then on mp3 compressed format, then on youtube compression!)
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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/17 12:55:30 (permalink)
    Hi,

    I really like the song and your vocal. I missed the previous versions but it sounds as though you've taken the advice offered by the other posters...the mix/production sounds very good to me. I do agree that the bass should be centered, though. Nice acoustic and electric tones, too.

    -gr

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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/17 13:19:49 (permalink)
    Not really a genre I'm in to, but the overall quality of the recording isn't bad. 

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    Re:Easter Song - The Cross [your comments appreciated] 2010/03/17 14:26:07 (permalink)
    I didn't hear the first version, but this is a nice Easter song.

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