Dean,

I'm listening on my system and I just love the song.

I like the first mix better for some reason... may just be the mp3 is better on that one.

I would recommend that you bring down some of the upper mids of your vocal treatment. Perhaps cut the highs aggressively on effects layers? I know you said it was a simple mix... maybe just bring down the high end before it hits the compressor.

The song is fantastic and powerful I can imagine that listening to it repeatedly while mixing can deeply effect your mood.

In any event I can sense that you want the grit on the upper range of your voice but I think it a bit past the sweet spot.

I'd endeavor to keep the high end on the master vocal and make sure the reverb has a reduced hi freq response.

I also think a slight delay effect with the same idea might help keep the vocals present while de-emphasizing the gritty nature of the upper mids.

I think this song is worth finishing into a fantastic piece of art.

It's just great!

best regards,
mike