New song "Just As Long As The Cubs Are Playing"

Wrigley Field - great place to see a came and gotta love the Chicago dogs!! Nice song about your love of the game and your team - would make a great drunken sing-along!!

I would write a song about the Royals but it would be too depressing...

Well I grew up in Chicago and even if I do live in Tampa my heart is still with the cubbies .....

Clifford

rockinrobby


it's a little pitchy in part, but it seems to fight the feel of the song, sitar :-) I liked the doubled parts. And I like the production. You might want to carve a notch out with EQ from those strings for the sitar. I hear that you have them panned but when the strings are playing it seems like they're trying to share the same space. 

Thanks Robby, where do you hear the pitchy parts?
 
 
Terry

Truckermusic


Well I grew up in Chicago and even if I do live in Tampa my heart is still with the cubbies .....

Clifford

I've been to just about every Baseball field in the great US. There are a lot of great fields out there, and Chicago has one of them!

philz


Terry this is an excellent tune, but I've heard enough of your material to say that I think you can do it better than this.  There are a few points where it feels like you're drifting a little flat at the end of lines in the chorus.  Maybe it's a matter of taste, but I personally felt that the reeds(?) parts were not the optimal backing. 

I enjoyed the listen, as I always do on your material, but I think this one is worth a bit more work.  Just one guy's opinion. 

...yes and there some sharpened vox notes too... however... overall, the message and delivery... I like it! What the song is about and it's intended audience won't care. This chorus should be sung anthem-like right before "take me out to the ball game." This is what Cub fans should be singing in the bars after a win... or loss.
 
It's blue-collar... and the production is sort of blue-collar, but it works. I think you'd be taking away from the the song's message if you hi-fi/HD this, and completely re-record. In fact you should send this to the local sports stations.
 
Yeah, you could probably switch the voicing on the those synth lead parts, even shorten them by one bar, and even omit the guitar solo, BUT, the attitude in your voice and delivery is perfect. Don't touch it!

Were you sing "it doesn't matter to me " is one place I hear it go flat.
The mix is pretty good on my crappy computer speakers. I can pick out all instruments fine.

philz

groveendroad

philz


Terry this is an excellent tune, but I've heard enough of your material to say that I think you can do it better than this.  There are a few points where it feels like you're drifting a little flat at the end of lines in the chorus.  Maybe it's a matter of taste, but I personally felt that the reeds(?) parts were not the optimal backing. 

I enjoyed the listen, as I always do on your material, but I think this one is worth a bit more work.  Just one guy's opinion. 

Thanks for the input Philz, Where are those flat points? This song means alot to me, so I would like to get it right.

Hi Terry- I listened again, and, overall, like it even more the second time.  I think it's a great tune, and Kiki's suggestion to send to local stations is a great idea.  You have a very unique voice (vaguely reminiscent of Jerry and the Pacemakers) and there is a charm and sincerity in your delivery.  I started taking notes for the parts that sounded a little off, but I lost them   I recall the word 'me' at around :50 and the word need in the same spot in the 2nd verse.  Then (maybe) 'leave' in the chorus???  I don't know... it's a great song, so maybe hang on to what you've got while trying another another take.
 
 
Thanks philz


I think this may be a bit better of the takes. Please let me know what you think

I re-recorded the Vocal track last night. Please let me know what you think.
 
 
Check it out @
 
 
http://www.reverbnation.com/play_now/song_7060429
 
 
 
Cheers, Terry

Piano sounds good.  You're playing it, I assume?  Nice job.  Vox sounds good and I'm not hearing flat parts.  That sitar? might be a tad loud in parts.  But overall, cool song!  :-)