My first self composed and written song - We Should

find link at the bottom of my epistel...:P
 
Hi all,
 
I'm a singer/songwriter and proud user of Sonar.
I've always been a person with great inhibitions, but 2,5 years ago I was fed up with myself and not darin' anything and decided to do something with what I've felt my whole life I wanted and started singing (for my ears only :P)
A year and a half ago I felt it was gettin' somewhere, found the guts to post some singing on youtube, and started to teach myself to play the keys and guitar.
Finding out I didn'completely suck at it was wonderfull, but also broke through walls I built around me all my life.
Now after a hard personal struggle I've finally found the courage to 'come out' with my own playing and to do it directly, record-play-post. Offcourse that means it is not perfect the way I want it, but I found it's more important to let it out and share, rather then achieve. This way I can learn more I feel. The song I wrote a year ago and is about feelings from a couple of years before. Age 30 was comin' close and feelin' old and failed, I sometime noticed some young girl would look at me in an interested way, but being stuck as I was it brought contradicting feelings...The young and always naive romantic getin' carried away, and the old failed cynic sayin it's wrong and feelin' ashamed to show....This conflict I tried to put in a song and y'day after a long period of tryin' to conquer myself, I posted my song, a straight as is take, on youtube....
I'd like for people to hear it, so check it out if you like via this link :
 
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E2HnSbNMRFk
 
Feel free to add me on facebook or youtube (under paul maua, but my original song is on facebook as I'm dressing it up a bit for my YT profile) and if you like my song, help a brother out and share it your page :)
 
Hope you'll enjoy and 'til my next original :)

I would liked to have reviewed this but I don't have a Facebook password and canned my account.  I'm avoiding all social network sites, except this one.

I hope I get to hear it, always glad to see someone break out and start recording.  It's more of a journey than a destination, and in the case of recording, that is the absolute truth.  Keep on keepin' on.

well the consensus is... don't post songs from facebook accounts.... I could get to it, but it stopped playing every 5 seconds and took 15 seconds to load the next 5 seconds..... the third stop was the third strike....

Post your music on www.soundclick.com it's free to open an account, easy to load up songs, and it streams with no downloads....

The little bit I heard, your voice sounds interesting.

ohw...i c now this is an active forum...very cool to know...I didn't see al the other reactions regarding the FB probs...which I didn't know about but certainley understand, I thought it was openly accessible and personally also wouldn't join anything just to see a vid (well...maybe if it is beyonce or the likes stolen home porn :P )
I'll be posting it on my YouTube account (without additions as I haven't gotten to that yet)..Should be on in an hour or so...I'll repost...

Kroneborge


Wow those vocals are spread out, I might mix them a bit more center.  Decent vocal though.  I thought they keys were decent too.

Course you still need the rest of the song :)

Tnx for the compliments and the tips. I know I still have much to learn and I see where you're comin' from. That will definitely be taken into account when I post my 'studio' version which I'm preparing for youtube. For now, I'm just throwing this one quickly on there as I'm finding this is a great forum with constructive feedback....
As for the 'rest', well I'm not quite sure what you mean there, but I am planning to add some more tracks (backin', strings etc.) for the dressed up version :)

lol...well...that's harsh though, or well played from your side :)
from your feedback I can tell though that you have much more talent and experience producing (like hearing i indeed spread it all out with the channel tools plugin :P)...
This is why I really do appreciate the feedback very much...I'm takin' my first babysteps as a singer/songwriter, but as a producer I haven't even been conceived yet :P...so thanks again and I'll be sure to let you know when I've brewed up the rest

Guitarhacker


well the consensus is... don't post songs from facebook accounts.... I could get to it, but it stopped playing every 5 seconds and took 15 seconds to load the next 5 seconds..... the third stop was the third strike....

Post your music on www.soundclick.com it's free to open an account, easy to load up songs, and it streams with no downloads....

The little bit I heard, your voice sounds interesting.
 
 
Well thank you for the feedback and the 'benefit of the doubt'....I've slapped it on youtube as I allready have a profile there and record video's of 'live performances' so if you like check it here:
 
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E2HnSbNMRFk
 
 I do however intend to make dressed up versions of my songs, 'studio' versions, and for that purpose I set up an account at reverb nation for uploading mp3's. You reckon that's a good choice too or does soundclick have benefits over that ?
Thanks again, I'm  really overwhelmed by the active interes people take here, allready I've had more usefull feedback from one post than an entire year on youtube.

paulo


I'd like to hear it too, but I'm not going to be joining FB so that I can do so - I expect there's quite a few more who think that way too, so you might want to try posting it somewhere else. A lot of people on here use soundclick, but there are many more options. You'll probably get a much better response that way.

Thanks for the response and for now I quickly slapped it on youtube, so if you like, you can check it here :
 
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E2HnSbNMRFk
 
I'm amazed by all the feedback and gratefull for it as I'm learning alot, so thanks again and hope you'll enjoy this first try with all of it's flaws.

Vocals are great but the MIC needs to be replaced  . The overall mix needs some work  , I think your taste in creating and writing songs as well as singing will carry you far up the road to where you want to be in your music and songs .

Your musical future looks bright , nice job !
Radio

Sounds like you certainly have the voice and the basis of something that could be very good. I look forward to hearing the finshed version very much. Not sure if the mic is the problem or the recording or the FX you have on it.

paulo


Sounds like you certainly have the voice and the basis of something that could be very good. I look forward to hearing the finshed version very much. Not sure if the mic is the problem or the recording or the FX you have on it.

Tnx man, that's very motivational and as for the probs...it's a combination I'm sure and I'm takin' all the feedback here to heart and feel helped out a great deal. At least now I've got some directions to look in. Tnx very much for your response

Nice song.  I'm looking forward to the remix.

You still might try soundclick too.  We have such a slow internet connection that Youtube often takes ages to load.  And I often have the patience of a 2-year-old. 

Reverbnation is good too. :-)