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Song for critique - Summer Girl
Hello all, I've written and recorded a new song with my song-writing partner. It's called Summer Girl. We've written it to coincide with the release of a novel, so the lyrics come from the book. We've recorded it with acoustic guitar, piano (from Garritan) and lots of backing vocals. You can hear the song on our website - www.jonasandplunkett.com I've set the song to play when you open the website. All critique is very welcome. Thanks! Adrian
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/28 11:54:43
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Most excellent. Your voices match up great.
I also really enjoyed "Spaceship", as well as "It Was You"
I really enjoyed the chord changes in "It Was You"
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/28 13:08:49
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Great song and fantastic recording too! Well done. Love the lyrics and harmonies. Please do a quick review of mine too! The Song I Came Alive http://www.reverbnation.com/circlesof3
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/28 18:30:24
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/28 19:35:45
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Hi Guys,
Took a look at your post history and you may want to concider doing some reviews on some of the other members projects. That get you some more feedback on your material.
Just sayin', ...... could not hurt.
Thats why we post, is to get some feedback, but it goes both ways.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/28 20:04:14
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Gifted, talented... and then some. A light touch of Simon and Garfunkel. Musically impressive, engaging. Talk about the whole package (x2). Stunning vocals. Excellent musicianship. Top acoustic production. Bookmarked your site. Bravo, truly. Did I say I was impressed? 
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/29 12:53:46
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Great tune - Really love your voices.
Piano is lovely too.
I could listen to this over n over...
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adrianplunkett
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/29 15:25:45
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Thanks for this feedback. It's really useful to know the song is well received. I always wonder if I've missed something obvious in the mix.
I think I'll reduce the reverb on the main vocal, and bring the piano down very slightly.
We're aiming to release this is May.
l'll plug in ny headphones and check out your tune, Wildman.
Cheers.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/29 21:08:27
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Well Done!!! Caught myself tapping and bouncing to it. Couldnt stop listening. Have you considered adding brushed/rimshot snare and kick to it? Thats kinda what came to mind into it a little while, my foot kept looking for just that little bit extra even though the song doesnt really need anything.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/29 21:42:49
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Wow! Great song, vocals and production.
Excellent work, guys.
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adrianplunkett
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/30 13:58:53
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Thanks again guys. Mike - yes we did try some gentle percussion, but it ended up a bit messy. So I went for "less is more"!
Cheers,
Adrian
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/30 20:35:25
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adrianplunkett
Thanks again guys. Mike - yes we did try some gentle percussion, but it ended up a bit messy. So I went for "less is more"!
Cheers,
Adrian
No, Thank you!!! I really enjoyed it. Thanks for the reply on the drums, was curious as to how it woulda turned out. You are right, Less is More on this one.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/30 20:38:22
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Very well done. Enjoyed the simplicity of this tune. Piano sounds really good and the guitar fits very nicely. 
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/03/30 23:26:42
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Super nice! Great job guys. The entire mix is awesome, IMO.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/04/03 21:46:28
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I agree with the others...great tune, great vocals and playing. Really nice guys! :)
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/04/06 02:20:38
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It's fantastic! Very sweet and beautiful~wonderful voice!
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/04/11 12:51:54
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Sweet song. I like how you arranged and mixed this in a very soft and clean way. It's really perfect for this tune.
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/04/11 16:10:25
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Very nice song, feel & lyrics.
I'd try to brighten up the lead vox a tad.
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adrianplunkett
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/05/03 17:12:06
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Well thanks to all your comments, and to the collective knowledge on this forum that has honed my recording skills over the years. We've now released the track, along with a "B-side" (also aired on here previously). The book is out in July. The song has been used as the soundtrack on a stop-motion animation by the author to promote her book. You can see the vid on our site if you are interested. www.jonasandplunkett.com Thanks again, Adrian
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Re:Song for critique - Summer Girl
2011/05/03 17:25:29
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What a happy song! When it ended I thought "AWE, I want MORE!". Great work guys!
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