Not Leaving Here (Without You)

I'm not sure what to say about this piece.  It's done in a pseudo rap style, but the vocal is off time here and there, or at least, awkwardly phrased.  In rap or hip hop, the groove is key, so the vocal is off putting for me.  However, anything is fixable, so I suggest you sit down with the lyrics and work on the phrasing and get this vocal in the groove.  The rest of the song could use a little help, also.  It doesn't generate much excitement or heat, which doesn't help the lyrics.  I'll let others who have more experience in this genre give their opinions, but for me, it starts with the lead vocal.

Yes, the verses aren't too bad but the choruses sound like the whole vocal track needs shifting a few milliseconds sooner. 'I'm' needs to fall bang on the 'one' of the bar, and it's hitting late each time.