Does anybody like that kind of stuff ????? (Work in Progress)

D

Well, the drums are strong and the rest of it seems weak.  I guess as just a test track it has direction but needs a lot more work.  The melody could be good with more texture as you talk about.  It's a good start.

first of all thanks for the comments.

@lynn all the elements are already there just only the right rhytmic and soundmixing were missing.
oh wait of course structure and some varis :-)
i gotta admitt i am a bit lazy when it comes to such things like structuring and varying of riddims.
here is a lill updated version.
Only the sounds were improved ( i hope so) ;-)
and it means alot that you have liked it.
THANKS

@ Warren
you are absolutly right it just a test track i wasn't sure if i should spend time on it.
so i needed some feeds to be sure
I improved the sounds of this lill piece but it still has got no structure.
but i think now it has more power than before.
i hope you will enjoy it.
THANKS

@ Beatiful
i am sorry but it's still just a small piece 
i haven't had much time to correct things.
I guess i know what are you talking off 
I will try to not to loose the puristic fell of synth.
THANKS for the constructive critics.


UPDATE!!! (lill improved version)

 

PS:
sorry for my miserable English

Switch out the kick sample with a tuned booming kick and you may have something here.

Lynn


I would love to hear this come to fruition.  Suggestions:  I only hear bass drum and snare, so a hihat or shaker or some other rhythic element would be welcome.  

+2.698687263957845

I just listened to the 2nd mix, and it's definitely getting better as you go.  You've incorporated some ideas into the song, and it shows.  This is getting closer to being a complete song, but it still needs something to tie it all together.  You're on the right track, and I have high hopes that it will have a happy ending.