Bonk (1st attempt at electronica) Remix April 2nd

Who could resist a title like that 


It's a good start Robert, plenty of scope for a melody over that bed.

Nicely done.  A few change ups of instrumentastion, maybe a few fx drops would spice up a really solid structure and beat.

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Thanks everyone!

I'm working on the lyrics now. Mostly writing things down as ideas then I'll see what happens. I did decide to just go with my standard Addictive Drums that I normally use. Unless I find something else in Z3ta 2 or something else. I'm not sure I like what I'm finding in Session Drummer 2 which is what's there now.

Hey Rob, nice to see someone try something out of their comfort zone, so kudos for that.

 There is promise in this track, but as it stands, it lacks the punch and dynamics that this type of track needs.

Some immediate thoughts that come to mind are:

Compression on the kick drum to give it some much needed punch and drive.

Some form of hi-hats to make it more ryhthmic sounding.

The snare is far to weak and indestinct and needs to be more interesting sounding imo.  What i would try if this track were mine, would be to alternate between a snare with a more industrial sound alternating with a sort of white noise snare (similar to a thunder crack)  with left/right delayed panning and some reverb to give it a dramatic effect. The contrast with a hard sounding/dry snare would sound good i reckon (in my head it does anyway) just an idea. Oh, and put some compression on that snare to give it more attack.

There needs to be a break of some sort to make the composition itself more interesting.  A different bass line leading into a variation of melody perhaps and a change in percussion.

Just a few ideas that i hope you find useful.

keep at it Rob as the experience will give you more confidence in making this type of track.

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Nicely done.  A few change ups of instrumentastion, maybe a few fx drops would ****e up a really solid structure and beat.

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What did I say that caused the elipse?  I'm sure it ain't as bad as it looks.  Maybe it doesn't like my spelling.
 
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Very cool.  

I agree, not a bad start. I think you have a decent enough theme to work with, but it is buried within the pad. I am not fond of the droning pad sound, but I think it is the right idea. Look forward to the progress.

Sounds pretty good to me - I tend to agree with James about all the elements competing with front and center. 

You're like a pro. This is cool.

Thanks Mark! I appreciate it!

Scotty, maybe I can get the town to use their plow on it and give it a few potholes? lol! Thanks for checking it out!

Thanks ohgrant! I appreciate it.

I edited the first post but here is the link for an updated version.

https://soundcloud.com/ro-34/bonk

I put a scratch vox on it and added a change. All the empty space is where a lead will be eventually. I took away the droning bass notes as it cluttered the low end. The drums are still not done. It depends on the leads on how I add fills or change things. It's still a wip so again, comments are welcome.
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It is what it is. I really didn't know what to think. I guess the title pretty much tell the story. You may want to rethink this one and get the singing parts down before the remake. Just my opinion, which is what it is.

Peace be with you. Blessings, John