Amateur Sketch !

Hard to say, guess i need to figure out how the instruments gonna play, and what style
it could change completely into something other. ..

this is just to see more how, i can make it myself
i am no singer, no'r one that can i play any instrument
" you can hear it in the composition" the way its played.
just a simple way of playing, that is my limit.

I have never made a whole song yet in my life, maybe i can manage it with this !
( i tend to make short pieces like 1 to 1.5 min, then after a few months i delete them ) 

It is quick mixed, not really gone into the deep of it, and done it properly
piano / bass / EP,  is from Steinberg Hypersonic 2 module, Drums BFD3 demo.

Microphone on the vocal is a Shure PG58
in my opinion a really bad mic....

Insert Reverb on vocal track(s) is : Ambience 
Send " Pre " Reverb ( BUSS)    is : AlgorVerb 

I hardly use any of the plugins that comes with sonar not even the, blue tubes bundle

but i love the ProChannel EQ,  it is sooo nice ;-)
also using Boost 11, but only at max +6db
if i need more ill use 2 instances due to a bit, " harshness " when pushed..

Jan

I guess you got a point there, thanks for your kind words
you make me wanna continue and work more with it

Ill give it a try and see if i can make a painting of it 

Thank's
Jan

The piano is drowning out the vocals, so lower the piano a bit or bring up the vocals a bit. You could equal everything out between  the 500-700 range. Sounds good other than that and I agree with Lynn on adding some additional verses and a bridge in the song. Great start.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

theguitarplayer
The piano is drowning out the vocals, so lower the piano a bit or bring up the vocals a bit. You could equal everything out between  the 500-700 range. Sounds good other than that and I agree with Lynn on adding some additional verses and a bridge in the song. Great start.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Thanks for the notifications on the overall sound picture and the piano / mix
piano / bass / EP,  and Ahhh - Ohhhhs vox, is from Steinberg Hypersonic 2 Vsti

( the song need additional variation to, so it not will be that " boring " ) to listen at.

The the mix is not finish, just a quick rough mix.

I agree  i need more verses, a bridge, and repeat the refrain (or make another )
to make it a complete " song "

BBB
I agree completely. You've got a great voice - sounds much like Mark Knoffler.  And the composition itself is really promising. I could hear some background vocals - ooOooOoos and ooOooAhs - really bringing the refrain to life.

Thanks for your comment, appreciate it a lot ;-D
the ooOooOoos and ooOooAhs , is from Hypersonic 2 vsti
i found there was something missing without it, yepp it gives the refrain more life

Lynn
Actually, there's nothing amateurish about this at all.  Throw in another verse or two and a bridge, and this song could be a gem.  As I've said before, it's a lot easier to start a song than finish it.  Make the effort here, and you'll be glad you did forever.

thanks Lynn, you got it right, i have a big problem to continue a song
it always seem's easier to start, rather than finish it 
Wonder why ?

Thanks everyone for the kind words and the good advice and helping me forward

Jan

The more you do it, the more consistent you'll be.  If you have enough disk space, record everything.

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Thanks for all comments.