Ain't That Lonely Yet

http://www.reverbnation.com/stevestallings/song/20411658-aint-that-lonely-yet
 
 Ya  ya hurt me  I ain't denying that    It's not the first time       that's a stone cold fact                                                          It's no secret                      might be hard to patch this time       
Was it this time   or the time before ya got your mad on    and you slammed the door
swore you'd  never  ever darken my day again
 
though the house seems kind of empty and the phone aint rang in days
might run out to the lake   have a beer with the guys  so they can see that I'm ok
I just stare at the phone but I can't pick it up yeah you know just how stubborn I get
Foolish pride  yeah I know   Got the t-shirt  done that But I aint that lonely yet
 
I aint that lonely yet I'm telling all my friends Yeah my mind is set I ain't that lonely yet
I ain't that lonely yet Hell, the paints still wet On this picture of life, love , hope , and regret I aint that lonely yet
 
Someone told me   they saw you out on the town said you looked fine   had your friends all around this phone ain't ringing dang the lines    must       be           down
I'd call your momma to check that you are ok but she'd tell ya  and there just ain't no way I'll make the first move   you might think I'm crawling back
 
 We had a good long ride together Spring   summer  flew by   now comes fall but after this part comes the winter and thats the coldest time of all
I aint that lonely yet I'm telling all my friends Yeah my mind is set I ain't that lonely yet
I ain't that lonely yet Hell, the paints still wet On this picture of life, love , hope , and regret I aint that lonely yet
 Steve Stallings 2014

Thanks.  I haven't been on the Sonar forum much recently and kind of the way it works is you review songs and other folks review yours. That's probably why it has not been commented on.  Since the last time I posted material here, I went back to school and took a class from Berklee as well as several others.  My vocals are always my weakest spot. This is all just me except drums which are Superior Drummer .

I agree with the above comments, has a loose feel to it. I believe it would present better if you tighten the timing up a little since it seems to me all anyone cares about out in the population is the groove.
 You sound like whispering Bill Anderson. Good song !

I usually refrain from suggestions...I sure didn't mean to be a jerk, my apology if it sounded that way.
 
I wasn't suggesting a different vocalist so much as some processing on your vocal:)  V-Vocal has become my go-to plug-in for fixing pitch and smoothing out the levels.  (I have Melodyne but it confuses me.)  I'm fairly new at this, but I have doubled my vocal and panned each completely to get a bigger sound, or you might try a delay and/or bringing up the level and then adding some reverb.  I usually experiment with the presets of the VX-64 Vocal Strip also.
 
Later. 

Hey Steve, this is a great song! I love the lyrics! I agree that maybe you were holding back when you laid the vocals down. I've done the same thing in the past when I didn't want anyone else to overhear me. Now, my attitude is "deal with it!" Belt it out, man! I think you have a good voice. You just need to put a little more "oomph" behind it. :) And I love that pedal steel! I'd like to hear it a little more! Those are my only crits, which really aren't crits. I like this song a lot! It should be on the radio. Nice job Steve!

The version that is up has been up a couple of weeks.  Hey guys, I don't think anyone is being a jerk or anything like that.  We are all writers and musicians.  I don't take any offense at anything here ever. I read the comments and then go back and see if I hear what others are hearing.  I am really a semi retired road dog who has toured and played for thousands of shows.  The last few years before I retired two years ago, I was touring at the level of large arenas, festivals, CMA shows etc....  Lots of bus time. I have never been the front man or singer. I am recognized as a fairly solid pro pedal steeler.  That is what I do best.   I love to write and record. I have quite a few years of recording experience and recently went back and took some additional formal recording courses at Berklee.  At 62, I find that I have much to learn. I am having a lot of fun... God Bless you guys!   steve
www.stevestallingsmusic.com

Well I'm glad it's getting some airplay. You deserve it. You did a nice job on this!

good work Steve...I think the mix could use some cleaning up...not sure if its a compression issue....I'd like to take a look at your CWB see how you glued this all together...
 
the writings there its a cool tune!
 
thanks for the share!