The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn

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ruralrocker2010
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2014/09/20 14:56:02 (permalink)

The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn

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Kicked back hittin' that rhythm and blues
For just a moment or two, yeah a moment or two
Are you down to feeling the groove
Well it all falls down on you
I get a funny feelin' that
Maybe in the aftermath
All of these things come true

A little more empathy
A little more juice for me
Maybe my time is threw
With you...


Baby, baby can you give me a sign
Cause I got nothin' to lose but a lot to prove...hey
Come on over let me free your mind
Just a little bit of time for you...with a little bit of love for you
Give me that right away to you


Curious about any feedback you could provide. All criticisms are welcome.


http://www.mediafire..._Mix_105bpm.mp3 - this version is at 105BPM
http://www.mediafire...Early_Mix_5.mp3 - this version is the same song at 110BPM - seems to change the dynamics a buttload. 

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    evadianepug
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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/20 19:10:22 (permalink)
    I really like the tune.  Nice changes, etc.  The vocal is well done for the most part.  It does need some production fixes.  I can't really tell you what to do there.  Just keep working.  it's coming together.  Oh, there was one "echo thing" on a BGV around the middle that didn't work for me.  That could just be personal preference.

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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/20 20:36:33 (permalink)
    I think I like the slower one better. I agree it's needs more production. IMO, there should be some sort of guitar riff to set it off. Not necessarily a lead but something like "Learning to fly" by Tom Petty. I'm just using that as an example as you would have to come up with something to fit your tune. I love your vocals. I don't like the drums. I would use a real kit of an emulation of one.
     
    Well done! I hope to hear it finished as it's a really nice bit of tunage.

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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/22 14:57:01 (permalink)
    +1 to using a real kit vs. electronic drums, or maybe the electronic snare layered with a real kit (and real snare)...   The extra reverb on the BV was a also a little weird for me and didn't seem to blend with everything else.
     
    But also a +1 to the song itself and the lead vocals, and I think the acoustic works nicely.   Definitely has a catchy vibe going on!
     

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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/23 15:16:39 (permalink)
    I like most everything about this song except that it's unfinished.  Can't wait to hear the final version.  Your voice is remarkable as usual.

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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/25 13:06:03 (permalink)
    Lynn
    I like most everything about this song except that it's unfinished.  Can't wait to hear the final version.  Your voice is remarkable as usual.


    Agreed with Lynn. If i was you take that radio effect of your voice.
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    Re: The Notorious Song Fragment Has Taken Another Turn 2014/09/25 20:14:10 (permalink)
    Get it done - this is good stuff - nothing I don't like about this.
     
    Very cool.
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