I don't care-Mix 5(New)

Yet another direction for me.
This tune was inspired by my daughter, Stephanie. My wife, Donna, captured a photo of her in a moment of carefree bliss on the beach in Oregon the day before her wedding.
I hope you like it.
Original:
 http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13016571
 
Mix 5:
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13029478
New version 1/28/15

lol. Sonar does that, 'cause I export from the master bus.
Thanks for listening

What James said it is a good start and needs something to finish it off, thanks for sharing.

Yep, I agree with the others on this one. It's a good idea that seems to beg for a melody line on top. I think a simple harmonica may be nice, but what do I know?

nice bouncy folksy tune - good job!

I think we are all in agreement this needs a lead of some kind on top. Definitely hear some Bob Marley in this. All sounds good from here. keep on it and let us hear the melody. :) 

Aside from some mix refinements, I can almost hear either a synth lead or perhaps tenor sax sitting over top.
 

Thanks, Gus. I'm working on a lead track now. It's not quite ready, but I think you guys are going to like it.
Drma, thanks for the note on the drums. I've spent a lot more time on the drums than I usually do, and I think it's worth the effort. This features Session Drummer 3 on the left, and EZ Drummer on the right. Lots if fiddling in the PRV. I'll consider raising them a bit.
Stevec, what sort of mix refinements? I'm open to your thoughts. Thanks for listening.
Thanks, sixfinger. It's got some bass in places, but I might think about expanding that.

Thanks Tim. You know, that "skip" was a happy accident. I was playing a sort of Celtic rhythm to the wrong back beat, and my hands just took me here. Doctored the drums a bit to fit the groove.
I still need to get the picture from Donna's files. It was a great moment. Yeah, she was dancing.
Moments before wiping out in the surf, she had handed me her phone. A wave took her and Xander(her son) down, and she lost her glasses. The glasses kind of sucked, but here she is, soaking wet, in a moderately fierce wind, potentially miserable but totally enjoying the moment. She's in free spirit mode, surrounded by the people she loves, on a gorgeous beach, and she is getting married in the morning.
I'll catch up with the songs you and others have posted, but for now I am focusing on pinning this one down.

Ok, so I wasn't so happy with the last version after all. It was kind of boxy.
This version(Mix 5), is, to my ears, more musical and better balanced.
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13029478
I have struggled with this mix, probably because I am using compressors more extensively than I have in the past.
I think it is about where I want it, but any input is welcome.
This song is a gift to my daughter, for inspiring the moment, and to my sister, for entrusting the Martin to my care.
Please share any thoughts to help make this song worthy of them.
 

Hey Robert,
  Having some lead really add more interest to your piece. Perhaps trying to shake the lead guitar sound up a little, ie change sound for a part in the track. You could use a different amp for say the part that you see as the chorus of the tune. just an idea.
:)

Bob - we're old pals so I hope I can speak frankly - the lead guitar isn't really cutting it here. I think it either needs a strong melodic hook to centre around and play off, or you really need to rip it up and go for it with some confidence (to echo the story behind the piece) As it is, it's just kinda noodling quietly around, and there are several bum notes. I know you can do better.

Thanks for the constructive crits, guys.
Gus, different amp... hmmm... maybe.
Beagle, aw man.. that's my favorite part. The lead pulls back, and the acoustic and clean guitar take over to pull it up from the Reggae passage. Maybe I need to put more emphasis on the acoustic?
And the acoustic does wash out from 2:20 to 2:24. I'm trying to figure out what I am doing to cause that.
James, I am going to take "noodling quietly around" as a backhanded compliment.
I believe you have used similar terminology to describe the Grateful Dead, and I was definitely in a GD groove.
That said, I am open to kicking around some ideas. And if a stray guitar track should drift across the pond, I might be inclined to listen to it.
i'm having a deja vu moment with Kenny and the Fishing Buchanan Creek project.
And yes, there are a few clinkers that need to be addressed.
Tom, I think you've hit the crux of the biscuit.
From the outset, this has been more of a groove than a song. And maybe it needs the slideshow.
When I listen to it, I can envision the images that you guys can't see. This now serves as inspiration to do the video and complete the vision.
As for the drums, it is in fact two drum VST's.  They are in the same rhythm, but emphasizing off beats.
As they come into sync with each other, it's sort of a metaphor for the impending wedding less than 24 hours away. Perhaps it's not translating the way I hear it. And I will listen for just plain odd hits.
Thanks again, all.
Tuesday and Wednesday are my days off, and the weather is going to be unpleasant. Perfect time for the studio.
I'll keep your thought in mind, and see what I come up with.