first attempt to record a tune from scratch. Suggestions appreciated!

I like it, Ward. It's not complicated, but it's genuine.
3 AM. Thoughts racing through your head. And you can't sleep, but how you wish you could.
Waiting for the dawn that never seems to come.
You have captured a vibe here, a disturbing but familiar place.
I've listened to this several times. it's oddly captivating, and a fine first effort.
Mix has a nice balance.
Heck, it's just nicely done.

This is great - genuine, heartfelt, good vibe and a bit depressing! I think your voice is engaging with a good rough edge to it. I am no expert, but i think the hi hat is a bit off putting. That aside, good stuff. 

This has a rawness about it that is perfect, like Tom I would leave just as is.
 

Felt like I was crashing off of something
But I don’t remember what I took.

 
Classic lines, which I should probably not admit to, but I have been there.
 
Good stuff keep em coming and thanks for sharing this defiantly worthy of a
 

Really appreciate the support, folks. Marshall, I'll take a look at the hi hat. Thanks for the feedback.
 
Funny, I've never wanted to be a singer, and sure never thought of myself as having singer potential. I just do it because there's nobody else at home to hear me. But hey, it's my life, eh? If I'm going to write about it I should probably be the one to sing about it. Sure feels weird though, making noises come out of your mouth and then making other people listen to them.
 
Again, I really appreciate the encouragement. 
 
--w

Wow this is good - your voice is great.

Very marketable, even. Your voice tells a story like the perfect voices can't. Paraphrasing David Byrne here, the more perfect the voice, the less believable the singer. I think your voice is completely good enough for this sort of thing, but more importantly, I believe the story you are telling.
 
That said,
 
please don't subject your appreciative audience to just two chords. Where's that confounded bridge? After one of your "f" chords, why not hang on a "g" for a while, then go back to what you were doing with the two chord two step. I think you need a chorus or bridge, and it should be really simple, too, but just sayin' . . . I know others will disagree . . .
 
a great song, man, and well sung.
 
-Tom

Bruce Springsteen once made a 2 chord song, the Born in the Usa anthem, at least I think there was just 2 chords.

Yes, I may have "stepped in it" a little here. There will always be listeners who dig just two chords, which is a matter of preference and therefore not really subject to comment on my part, when I say "please don't subject your listeners to just two chords" - that's pretty harsh of me, sorry.
 
Except that, "Born in the USA" has two, while "Comfortably Numb" has like 12, and which one would you rather listen to in an elevator?  :)
 
Your song is pretty excellent the way it is, I hope more people get to hear it.
 
thanks,
-Tom

ward s
 One day I aspire to write a three chord tune (and in the mean time I guess I'll just take the stairs). 
 

 
lol. That was just worth quoting.
 

Cool tune. Glad I listened to it in the morning, might have been a bit close to the bone if had of been 2 a.m.