Am I going in the right direction? - Just Cant Help Believing

Lynn
I'm just curious.  I see it was written by Barry Mann, and I remember B. J. Thomas doing this back in the day, yet I see you made no mention of that.  I listened to the original on Youtube to be sure, and you did manage to replicate his version somewhat.  Though you did a fine job, it's always risky to do a cover song if you don't capture the essence of the original or recreate it so much that it becomes your own.  With the modern equipment that you have, I would think that you could have added something new to the mix.  Otherwise, it's OK.

optimus
I'm curious to know which sound modules you used to generate the drums, bass, brass and strings. To me it sounds very much like midi hardware sound generator modules. While these have their place, I think that for a showcase song like this to display your talents, Sonar offers better sound generators.
 
I think you  have a fine voice and your programing skills are fine, but it's the lack of solid bass and cheezy drums and brass sounds that let the song down. I agree with Lynn that doing covers is risky and you need to add something to make it your own. That could be as simple as changing the arrangement slightly, or using live instruments. You don't need to follow the arrangement or instrumentation of the original artist. Still it's a good effort.