Caveman

Please listen, all crits are welcomed!
 
I started this in 2011, wanting something simple, some kind of butt rock I thought, just so I could learn up some Sonar goodness. Here it is, a mere four years later.
 
I'd seriously love any comments that can help me make it better!!
 
http://www.songsbytom.com     it's the first song in the player on the right . . .
 
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 

Sounds most excellent, my fellow caveman.  You probably already know my advice.  Remember the past, but focus on the future and make it even better.
 
Time to evolve forward to your next song. :)

Mix is generally OK does sound a little all down the middle for me, thanks for sharing.

thanks Andy Synkrotron! There are definite moments of throwback hard panning, I was shooting for the style of the maybe early 70's - the whole song is about a throwback so I thought it might fit.
 
thanks, Dan! I appreciate the comments, particularly the "crunchiness" - which often comes with it's evil twin , "mud"
 - a better mixer would clean this up, I'm still not satisfied but  . . .
 
- as Walt said, time to evolve rather than devolve! Lots more tunes to do!
 
and thanks Bapu!
 
 Hey, it seems I'm not alone in starting a project and getting it completed years later!!! Kudos to all the weekend warriors here.
 
cheers, 
-Tom

Well done Tom.
 
I agree clever lyrics and you have a vocal delivery that grabs attention, sounds like you have plenty of fun doing it.
 
I cant really crit much, it a simple track which works well. Too long for my taste, but the many changes probably make Tom...well sound like Tom!
 
Good stuf,
 
Cian

Loved the tune, Tom, so much so that I would say that I'd like to hear a little more clarity (or maybe level) on the vocal because I think the songs message is that good.

very nice song + mix ! enjoyed listening to it and you can tell the band really enjoys the music.
 
since you're asking....and just hoping it helps....here's some things I'd change
(I'm still learning to mix, so don't shoot me...).
 
the vocal would benefit from some growl/grunt, maybe add some saturation and a little reverb or delay.
also sounds like singer was a little too close to the mic (hear some lips/mouth noises).
would take 0.1 or 0.2db off the vocals overall to let it sit better in the mix.
 
would add a steep curve EQ at 5024 to the drums for some presence (they sound just a little distant, but fine).
 
 

OK, I get the humour in that one.   
 
It's got that retro feel, though when the Farfisa (?) comes in sounds more 60's to me.    Mix-wise the balance does seem a little one-sided in certain sections.   But either way it's a fun tune!
 

Good stuff Tom, it's a treat through headphones, I like the panning madness

 A really cool song and nice sounding production. I enjoyed

Catching up on a few responses -
 
Phil - that's a tremendous compliment! Much obliged! 
 
Ohgrant - Glad you liked it! Feel free to pick a few nits if you have any . . .
 
Julian - thanks and I love that sort of observational criticism, I'll reconsider what is going on at those points you mentioned. Thanks for being specific!
 
Jamesg1213 - Ah, I did get carried away with the panning! Glad you liked it. For some reason, in Sonar I have never really loved how it handles panning, I always hear a -slight- degradation in the audio. I know if you choose to radically pan a file that is already stereo, it's going to maybe introduce some kind of phasing? I just got out of my depth so if anyone can toss me a life preserver of knowledge, many thanks.  :)
 
Warren - dude thanks, I appreciate it. Four years on this sucker! Although in actual time spent, probably only a month!
 
SteveC - gotcha, that farfisa I just call "cheese organ" and it does belong in the 60's!
 
 
peace out,
-Tom

Olivier,
 
Boy, I sure appreciate any reference to Dire Straits - they/Mark Knopfler are on my desert island playlist for sure.
 
Also, thank you so much for recommending I put lyrics up, for the non-native English speakers! That blows my wig off. Translated - I'm honored! and it is done. Next time you get to my site, check out the lyrics page if you wish. 
 
cheers,
-Tom

Tom,
  This one is a lot of fun and sounds great on my system.  Not sure if there is anything to do other than to call it done and enjoy it.  Nice stuff!