groveendroad
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She's An Ordinary Girl
I wrote this song about a person I once worked with. She asked me to write a song about her. I'm sure you can understand why I could have never play it for her. Funny thing, it made me take a closer look at her while I was writing. All I could come up with was a gold digger type, going by how she treated her boy friends. I always feel good about my lyrics, it's all that mixing stuff I work so hard at that makes me crazy some times. https://youtu.be/-0ozfIU1lNs Cheers, Terry
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herbroselle
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/22 10:51:21
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the tune has a wonderfully poignant quality.
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/22 13:46:41
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Hey Terry,
Good song and lead vocal. Not crazy about the synth on the right. Think this could still use some arrangement and new mix. Herman's Hermits in 2015!
It needs a jangling guitar part too!
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groveendroad
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/24 21:30:49
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Rimshot
Hey Terry,
Good song and lead vocal. Not crazy about the synth on the right. Think this could still use some arrangement and new mix. Herman's Hermits in 2015!
It needs a jangling guitar part too!
Thanks for your thoughts Rimshot. I'm not sure why, but this has been a mix from hell for me. I think I may have settled due to the amount of work on the mix. I just couldn't get the right side to sound right for me, I was just hoping it was me be picky and not the song. I'll give it another go!!! Cheers, Terry
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/25 00:06:56
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cute song 
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/25 07:12:34
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Jimmy pretty much said it all.
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/31 17:19:17
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/07/31 22:31:01
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☼ Best Answerby groveendroad 2015/08/03 18:42:33
OK. I am going to get critical on this because the song is worth it. Way too much mids. THere is no low end on my system. Bass guitar is so far back. You need to set the foundation with bass and kick to support the mid instruments (guitar and synth). Lead vocal is too over the top. So... The synth is really in the way. Start the mix over. Use bass, drums, vocals, and get that perfect. Then add the synth and stuff. Be careful not to overpower the drums, bass, and vocal. You might also want to use a different snare sound. Maybe something that is wider with more rattle. Listen to this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TreNe5D8OXE Check out the dynamic range between lows to highs. Listen to the bass vs. snare and lead vocal. The guitars and synths are secondary.
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/08/03 18:43:28
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Rimshot, what do you mean by Lead vocal is too over the top.
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Rimshot
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/08/03 19:51:20
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Hey, "Over the top" means it is way too loud.
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/08/04 07:58:14
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nice song....IMO i would sink vocal a little back in the mix & maybe do something with the drums they seem a little lifeless & a bit deep in the mix.....a little bit of tweaking & i think youve got a really good song
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/08/04 16:39:17
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Really good song, Terry, but I have to agree with Jimmy's (Rimshot's) comments above so far as remix suggestions go. I think he's right on the money. The song has a lot of potential if you can get the mix squared away.
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groveendroad
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Re: She's An Ordinary Girl
2015/08/05 15:31:08
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Rimshot
Hey,
"Over the top" means it is way too loud.
Thanks for your help Rimshot, and all. Here I go again. I'm trying to make it sound good on 4 systems. That's the hard part. She's An Ordinary Girl - take three - http://sclk.co/s7ujs0
post edited by groveendroad - 2015/08/05 18:50:23
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