Relapse - Opinions needed

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good as other song of mine that you have heard?

 
Hi Cian,
 
Yeah... I mean, it is different, for sure, but your vocals are, yet again, sound as a pound (or euro). Accompanying music fits well, in my opinion.
 
At 90% complete, I'm sure there are still things you yourself want to improve.
 
Flow? Get bored? Bothered me?
 
Don't know about flow, exactly. It seemed okay to me.
 
The song is too short to get bored of. I mean... Have you tried to listen to one of my ten plus minute ambient shabookas (made up word)? I'll give you bored
 
 
 

I liked the song and the lyrics seemed meaningful to me. The time/feel change in the end was interesting. It might be useful to do that in the middle of the song and then back to the beat as it were. 
 
You have a lot of different elements in the song and the transitions are nice. It kept me entertained till the end even though its not my typical listening style choice.
 
I like you vocal style also and it worked well with this.
 
I would change the sound of the snare and maybe the kick as well.
 
Good job.

RELAPSE IS A PART OF RECOVERY...GREAT JOB! -SLF
 

Hi folks,
 
Thanks for all your feedback. I went back and had another pot at this.
 
Seems that the second half of the song interested people so I decided to place that in the middle.
 
I have included  many other modications including bass, sound effects, percussion samples etc
 
Im still keen/cian ;-) for feedback in a sense of impact of the track, coherency and what elements of the song are/should be to the fore.
 
Updated mix:
https://soundcloud.com/cian-mcgovern/relapse-30sept/s-wJS2J
 
Cian

I really like what you've done with this Cian. Far from celtic though :).....I can't find much to nit about on this, I mean, we all have different approaches and opinions on what we think sounds good. The mix was really hot in my cans..if I would have been at half volume I would have probably hurt my ears, yet it didn't sound overly compressed. You've done a great job of limiting it to maximum loudness for this kind of music.
As to my earlier comments about our opinions, I'll give you a few of mine but they are only opinions and not necessarily any better or worse. When I listen to the vocal it comes in vocal spurts...statements are grouped with a definite stop and go feel. If it were me I might take more advantage of that in the music. IOW I might make the stops more abrupt coinciding with rhythm..does that make any sense to you..probably not :) I think it would make the beat and movement more dynamic. Sounds great what you've done!

Thanks guys
Dan, from 1:30 is that catchy hook "Relapse....relapse" I obviously need to get to it quicker or play it more.
Starrise, thats a good one I always think I struggle to get that loudness. I do know what you mean by the music phrasing, you mean emphasise it.
Daryl, thats a good idea and yes I prob will saturate it take the sugar off it.
 
Any other comments before I go at it again?
 
https://soundcloud.com/ci...relapse-30sept/s-wJS2J
 
Cian

Beagle,
 
Exactly the feedback Im looking for. Thanks
 
Seems to be a common place where people's attention wilt.
 
As for the last gun shot, yes it is different, just cos well I could but if that what you observed then it may be better to change it.
 
Thanks
 
Cian

Ok Wookie, thanks mate
 
Cian

I like this a lot because it very unpredictable.  The beginning was understated but then it kicks into gear about a minute into it.  Hard to compare to anything else, and thus...great!