'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome

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2015/10/09 18:30:29 (permalink)

'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome

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I've been a Sonar user for quite some time now, but this is the first time that I've mixed and posted a pop/rock song. My mixing skills aren't all that, so any constructive criticism is welcome.
 
https://soundcloud.com/ant-832623685/visiting-wonderland
 
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UPDATE
I've tweaked the levels of some of the instrument tracks. Any comments welcome
https://soundcloud.com/ant-832623685/visiting-wonderland-mix-2/s-hHUdb
post edited by Antler - 2015/10/27 19:33:36
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    synkrotron
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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/13 03:37:15 (permalink)
    Hi Ant,
     
    Antler
    but this is the first time that I've mixed and posted a pop/rock song.



    There's a lot going on in this pleasant song. As best I can tell, I can hear all the elements okay, but I'm not that great at mixing this sort of stuff myself, so someone else will need to chip in on the finer points of mixing.
     
    Did you just mix this tune, or are you the composer and performer too?

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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/13 08:36:15 (permalink)
    My thoughts:
    • Bass is buried. Bring it up, but watch out for any EQ issues.
    • Cymbals are a little too loud.
    • Vocal is uneven, try doubling it.
    • Kick could use more low end thump.
    Not a bad song at all. With a bit more work this could be quite good.
     
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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/13 12:35:57 (permalink)
    What Dan said plus I hear some timing issues as well.  Thanks for sharing.

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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/13 17:17:52 (permalink)
    This tune has some really nice touches that push my buttons, really nice work. Keeping in mind what others have said, I'd consider adding some background harmony singers. The melody in the pre-chorus and chorus have real potential to be quite "anthemic" and some energy in the lead and the addition of background singers would push it into the real of awesomeness, imho.
     
    Thanks for posting this!
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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/13 18:40:03 (permalink)
    Thanks for the kind words and advice!
     
    I did the mix; I'm also the vocalist and guitarist (would probably like to be better at both). Bass is Cakewalk SI bass, strings are Dim Pro libraries, and drums are Superior 2.
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    Re: 'Visiting Wonderland' - constructive criticism welcome 2015/10/27 19:25:14 (permalink)
    I've tweaked the levels of some of the instrument tracks. Any comments welcome

    https://soundcloud.com/ant-832623685/visiting-wonderland-mix-2/s-hHUdb
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