"The Stars At Night" v2

Many thanks for the helpful ideas on this one! Absolutely great forum!
 
Lower voice lowered so the vocal is less weird.  Snare lowered, drums panned, sparkly bits brought out more. All good suggestions!
 
Any comments are very welcome, particularly if you help me mix it better!
    it's the first one in the player on the right side . . .
http://www.songsbytom.com  
 
thanks,
-Tom

I cannot help mix it better it was fine as is. Or perhaps the bass was too loud. Probably not. The song was very nice IMO. Just about perfect pop song.

Really like this. I also think the vocals are sitting a little strange in the mix. Everything else seems great.

Excellent Tom - I really like this - it is really free flowing and is totally unpredictable. Love the voice and ll of the ear candy.
Mix-wise, my only crit would be that the main drums start off very narrow which is great to build tension but it would be great if they were set free around the middle of the song and opened up in the stereo field.
Going back for another listen - great stuff.

Daryl1968 - great idea on the drums, I'll open them up a bit. That's actually something I fail to attend to, it's easy to focus on melodic things and just have the drums kind of be there. Thanks for the idea.
 
Freddy - many thanks, glad it's workin' for ya!
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 

Mix works here Tom, a number of points have been raised above so... Thanks for sharing.

Tom, 
 
Good song.   Only suggestion I would have would be to pull back the lower vocal and maybe push the top vocal up a hair.  The rest is awesome.
 
Regards

Hey Tom,
this is really great!  love the song, the performances, the arrangement!
 
everything except the vocals.  sorry.  it's just not working for me as others have mentioned, too.
 
that's my only crit!  loved everything else!

Hey eSoul, very dynamic song.  I like the way it changes around.  It forces the listener to focus in.  The french horn sounding thing is nice, and then the piano comes in, cool.  Then it all kind of winds down, and the driving beat comes back in with the staccato  strings,
 
Well crafted song fella.  Inspirational to me as to how to mix thing up a bit. A lesson in what is possible.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Not much to add to the mix comments above - vocals and drums are mainly it for me.
 
The song itself is really well done. The chord changes and melodies are very nice, and I like those repeated staccato string lines (Coldplay-ish).    Overall I think it's different yet still familiar. 

I had this on my desktop while doing some other stuff and went back to it several times. I finally hooked up my Boston Acoustic speakers complete with subwoofer, so I think I got a good representation of the music....actually listened to several of your other ones.
 
I came away from it with the feeling that nothing sounded out of place to me. The music itself is really relaxing. Very creative mix. I think this is a good example of a musician who is good at musicianship AND good at mixing. You wove the mixing and the music together in a pro way that I would be hard pressed to pick out from a lineup of anything else similar out there being sold for profit. One personal thing that struck me was the lower vocals are not something I'm accustomed to hearing all alone. I didn't dislike it, it was just a difference. 

Everything is clear as a bell. As other have mention there seems to be a problem with the vocals coming at me from through a tunnel, other than that I think you have nailed it.

Hey Tom, very well done ...the arrangement is creative and keeps the listener's interest throughout.  The vocals are also spot on but something about the reverb bugs me a bit -- just a bit though.  Nothing else to critique -- very fine work...bravo.

Much obliged (as Festus would say  . . .)
 
GusRogers - thanks hombre. I'm fighting the vocals a bit on this tune, it seems. To be honest I'm not really hearing the "vocals coming out of a tunnel" effect, but as four or five of y'all have made the same comment, I know it must be there somewhere.
 
Hey, actually, the vocals DID come out of a tunnel - my mouth is a tunnel! It's old, leaky, about to collapse. It's attached loosely to my brain, which is a Bridge to Nowhere.  :)
 
 
Jesse Q - thanks, yep it's about me wife. Ready? 1 . . . 2 . . . 3 . . . .  "awwwwwwwww!"   Now back to the music.  :)
 
ABull - many thanks, you certainly know a thing or two or three about songwriting! I'll eventually figure the vocals out. there is a very light doubled vocal track, 1 octave lower. It  used to be completely audible, but I've tried to tuck it waaaay under the main vocal . Maybe it sets the reverb off - I'll check and see if both vocals are going to the same reverb. hmmmmm.
 
Lynn - very kind compliments indeed, thanks very much. You are always very open with your praise, and I like your work, too. When you hear the Radiators, you will think you are singing for them. Maybe! Here ya go: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vv1Eu6azUx8              hope you like papaya . . .
Many happy returns to the forum, and keep bringing us yer songs!
 
 
cheers,
-Tom