Moshkito
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New Poem Started for retirees
Hi,
time changes, it comes and will go
and we think about ... times aglow
hoping to find, at the end of the road
a fleeting thought, ideas will load
...
time changes, it comes and will go
and we wonder who is Michelangelo
...
(actually wrote this at work for a retiring fellow member of our group ... with a thank you to TS for his inspiration!). There will be more to it, but this is the start!
Music is not about notes and chords! My poem is not about the computer or monitor or letters! It's about how I was able to translate it from my insides!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 10:43:24
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 10:47:22
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☄ Helpfulby jamesg1213 2015/12/17 12:11:13
Roses are red violets are blue
You're retired
I'm still Bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 12:04:15
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☄ Helpfulby craigb 2015/12/17 12:43:17
Moshkito
and we wonder who is Michelangelo
He was an Italian Mutant Architect Ninja Sculptor and Painter Hero Poet in a Half-Shell. HTH.
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SteveStrummerUK
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 14:34:03
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I had to take
the batteries out of
my carbon monoxide alarm.
The loud beeping was
giving me a headache and
making me feel sick and dizzy.
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 15:23:30
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I have to go now
The voices are calling me
From (so) far away
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 15:24:12
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I have a hammer
I hammer in the morning
I hammer all day
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 15:25:06
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I just want to bang
On the bloody drum all day
I don't want to work
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/17 20:15:43
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I wandered lonely as an arse
The boy stood on the burning arse
Once upon a midnight arse
There was a young man from Nantuckarse
I must go down to the seas again, the lonely sea and the arse
Shall I compare thee to summer's arse
It does rhyme though.....ya?
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 00:07:25
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I prefer Haiku.
I hate the sea birds
That gather all around me
And crap on my shirt
(I've got dozens more on various topics, many of which violate the TOS. Oh well!)
Time for all of you to head over to Beyond My DAW!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
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☄ Helpfulby craigb 2015/12/18 05:31:13
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 05:20:08
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Glyn Barnes
Mine is an instrumental.
Best Answer nominee! 
Time for all of you to head over to Beyond My DAW!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
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Glyn Barnes
Mine is an instrumental.
In the running for funniest post of 2015
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 08:18:14
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Glyn Barnes
Mine is an instrumental.
LOL!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 08:31:05
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The boy stood on the burning deck
Polishing the Captain's rollocks
The skipper said "You must rub faster...
...or I'll string you up by the thumbs
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 09:40:58
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☄ Helpfulby SteveStrummerUK 2015/12/18 10:22:11
SteveStrummerUK
The boy stood on the burning deck
Polishing the Captain's rollocks
The skipper said "You must rub faster...
...or I'll string you up by the thumbs
I think you should raise the bass lower the toms and tame those cymbals. It's a great start though.
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Moshkito
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 09:46:01
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Hi,
Hmmm ... we have to re-define poetry ... too much song for you guys!
Music is not about notes and chords! My poem is not about the computer or monitor or letters! It's about how I was able to translate it from my insides!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 09:48:08
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And here I thought this thread might yield some lyrical inspiration...
 All else is in doubt, so this is the truth I cling to. My Stuff
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Moshkito
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 09:53:50
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bitflipper
And here I thought this thread might yield some lyrical inspiration...
My thoughts exactly ... but I guess that some folks couldn't careless for a poem, any more than they do lyrical BS. Can you imagine what Byron or Shelley would say these days? Frankenstein would never have been written!
Music is not about notes and chords! My poem is not about the computer or monitor or letters! It's about how I was able to translate it from my insides!
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
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☄ Helpfulby jamesg1213 2015/12/18 11:43:30
Moshkito
Hi,
time changes, it comes and will go
and we think about ... times aglow
hoping to find, at the end of the road
a fleeting thought, ideas will load
...
time changes, it comes and will go
and we wonder who is Michelangelo
...
Moshkito
bitflipper
And here I thought this thread might yield some lyrical inspiration...
Can you imagine what Byron or Shelley would say these days? Frankenstein would never have been written!
Yes, I can see that your poem is on the literary level of Byron or Shelley. My bad.
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
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☄ Helpfulby bapu 2015/12/18 11:48:40
Moshkito
Can you imagine what Byron or Shelley would say these days?
Yes, they would say ''don't give up your day job Pedro, now pass us the absinthe''
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 12:53:45
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Another Haiku sample.
Many have stumbled
On the path to victory
I call them losers
Time for all of you to head over to Beyond My DAW!
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bapu
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 12:55:57
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craigb
Another Haiku sample.
Many have stumbled
On the path to victory
I call them losers
Best haiku ever craigb (ITIAYH)
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Moshkito
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/18 17:01:10
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bapu
Moshkito
Hi,
time changes, it comes and will go
and we think about ... times aglow
hoping to find, at the end of the road
a fleeting thought, ideas will load
...
time changes, it comes and will go
and we wonder who is Michelangelo
...
Moshkito
bitflipper
And here I thought this thread might yield some lyrical inspiration...
Can you imagine what Byron or Shelley would say these days? Frankenstein would never have been written!
Yes, I can see that your poem is on the literary level of Byron or Shelley. My bad.
I wish! I can't write like them at all, and would never try! Sadly the comment was about the time and the friends creating stuff during their fun time ... and not about the writing itself ... and then these turkeys here talk about my this and that and unintelligeable ****! At least man up to your own crap! GRINCH is ME!
post edited by Moshkito - 2015/12/23 09:52:42
Music is not about notes and chords! My poem is not about the computer or monitor or letters! It's about how I was able to translate it from my insides!
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Re: New Poem Started for retirees
2015/12/22 20:07:53
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I'm no buck,
She's no fawn.
You punky kids get off my lawn.
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