New Song: Golden

Hi Larry!
 
The overall vibe of your song is good, and the rhythms and percussion extras are very nice. Here are some thoughts:

• The lyrics are impossible to understand. You've got to get the vocal to be clearer and a bit more up front.
• The breaks between the verses are a little long. Unless you are going to do a true bridge or breakdown between verses, I'd suggest shortening that a bit.
• I didn't hear a chorus? Or are there no verses?
• The mix is decent, just needs some polish to tighten it up and glue it all together.

With a bit of work, you can have a really nice song here. There's certainly lots of potential.
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Nice vibe and arrangement and certainly has potential. I also liked the string introduction whether this was sampled or played from samples it came across well. It would be nice if this could come in again somewhere during the track maybe as an outro.
 
I couldn't however hear/understand any of the lyrics as they seemed to be buried in the mix some how. I would also lay off that snare a bit, although I believe it may have a place in the song structure. Maybe have it during the guitar instrumentals with the volume dropped slightly and drop it completely during the vocal parts. Gain staging could be your friend here.

Thanks for the feedback. It's a work in progress and I'll consider all suggestions. I'm not sure what's going on with the lyrics as I can hear them clearly on everything I've listened on...iPad, PC, car etc. I'll certainly rethink that snare.

Great groove and nice clear mix. Do you intend to have a rap in the 'verse' section?