Back On The Street Again

Chopped full of mistakes, but I thought I would post it anyway thinking someone might like hearing it. Thanks to all who do. I'm no pro, this was another step at the time in my learning process, and I hope I done well.
 
 

I tried your link but it ended up going to Box Blog and asked for a password?  I don't have a password and can't log on.

Serious_Noize!
 
I lost the master tracks in a hard drive crash, but honestly I know I could do so much better now days on a re-do. Should I?
 
Would I be wrong by saying it's kinda a Boston sounding influenced song? I am a huge Boston fan.
 
 
 
 
 

 
It's a well put together rocker Bobby, hints of Boston for sure. Good riffs and the 'chorus' section certainly has a lift to it.
 
Timing is a bit shaky though, I'd say it's worth a revisit.

Hi Bobby , like what's going on but a good drum track is needed for sure .
If you need help with the drum track you know how to reach me , keep rocking buddy !

J. S.

J.S.
Hi Bobby , like what's going on but a good drum track is needed for sure .
If you need help with the drum track you know how to reach me , keep rocking buddy !

J. S.

Thank you James, it's an old tune, actually the more I listen to it I wonder what was I thinking at the time! I guess that is the beauty of music ya know, you can record your feelings through sound sometimes and they define how you felt at many moments in your life. 
 
Thanks James, and thank you for the Drum offer, I know you are busy man, If I re-do this one you are the the first I will keep in mind for drums. 
 
Thanks again!
 

kennywtelejazz
I happen to agree with James , your tune has potential and it may certainly be worth a revisit ....
The bass part and the drummer need to get on the same page if you happen too do the song over ...
Other than that , just for you my friend ...it needs more Tele
 
Kenny
 
 

Thanks Kenny, it is chopped full of mistakes no doubt. I've been working on trying not to make those in the future by practicing lately on things I didn't in the past when I made this tune up and recorded it. 
 
LOL! I was the bass player/WANNA BE TRYING and the DRUMMER/trying to find my way at the time using bad midi techniques. LOL, when I recorded this I was just happy to be recording again. 
 
LOL!!!! AND YES!!!!!!! It is in desperate need of a TELE!!!!!! 
My heart cries when listening to this tune thinking of that illusive TELE that should brandish it's sound on the higher plains of the internet while gracing it's way with a somber sound in the twilight of a gracefully bombastic sound. 
 
Hahahahaha, Uh, I was trying to say, that when "All else fails the TELE will tell the sound that time should be telling". Or is it "TELE"'ng?.
 
I've been trying to learn fingerpicking style because it's so much fun, but I guess I need to grab a pick and get back to beating on the strings instead of play with them! Hahahahaahaha
 
Thanks again Kenny, your music and playing are a great inspiration to all my friend!!! 
 
 

One more thing. You play the drums and the bass and any other instrument you think it needs. You'll be surprised at what you come up with if you spend the time on it! It also will teach you ,in the process, more about writing songs. Stay with it till you've finished then if it just doesn't work for you bring other players in. 
 
P.S. this advice is coming from someone that writes rock songs in 3/4 

Bobby - hi. That's cool. I think this has a ton of potential - this is good - but I think I'd revisit.
 
Nice.

bayoubill
One more thing. You play the drums and the bass and any other instrument you think it needs. You'll be surprised at what you come up with if you spend the time on it! It also will teach you ,in the process, more about writing songs. Stay with it till you've finished then if it just doesn't work for you bring other players in. 
 
P.S. this advice is coming from someone that writes rock songs in 3/4 

Thanks Bill. I am always amazed at your knowledge on music, and you have the music to back it up also. Thank you for taking the time to listen and reply my friend. 

mgh
plus ca change - you have great guitar chops and ideas. actually the mix is good too given the (i assume) limitations in drum vst. just needs a vocalist and your staying power/will.

Thanks MGH, I wish I had your skills on playing the guitar it would make things a lot easier on a remake. I'm gonna work on it though. The drums will be the hardest part for me honestly, it's a simple standard 80's chord thing riff. Repeat/Repeat/Lead/Choose your destiny and fade away.... LOL, Yeah the fade was thing is like playing the game Mortal Combat you might say, if someone listens that long then they either like it or they don't where the songwriting goes. 
Thanks again Man! I appreciate you taking time to listen. I think I'm going to re-do this one. Thanks again!