The Elephant in the Room

Things you think about while lying awake at 3am.

I'm having a lot of trouble getting the vocal to work.
I use Izotope de-crackle to remove mouth noises which I can't control. It does a good
job but it doesn't get everything and sometimes there are some introduced artifacts.

Thanks for listening.


https://soundcloud.com/orygun/elephant-in-the-room



Elephant in the room
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We all know
no one's immune
from the elephant
in the room
 
 
It's a fact of life but
we don't think about it
It's just  sort of there
At the edge a bit

Once upon a time  
There was lots of time ahead
I'll write that book   
This year you said

You never got to it
Other things  to do
The time is gone
With nothing to show

Does it really matter
to write a book or song
something to remember me
After I'm gone

Three am
I'm staring at the ceiling
There's a whisper in my ear
The elephant is stirring


break

I think about my life  
Lying there awake
all that I remember
are all of my mistakes

I made a lot of choices
I dwell on them again
Playing back scenarios
Of things I cannot change

I've let some people down
Need to make amends  But
I've burned all my bridges
Never see them again

What's it all about
Something to ponder
Is there any purpose
Or nothing there I wonder

existential musings
in the daylight
sobering  reality in
blackness of night


Three am
I'm staring at the ceiling  
I catch a glimpse of something
The elephant is stirring

break

Gray light of morning
streams thru the blinds
the elephant retreats into
the shadows of my mind

Thanks Wal
I've tried different things to reduce the snap crackle pops that come out of my mouth while singing, including mic placement. Pretty near hopeless. I'll probably need to find a singer or just go back to instrumentals only.

Hi Bjorn,
 
Great lyrics... Kinda strike a chord...
 
Vocals wise... Not so bad at all... I agree with what Wayne says, 100%
 
Looking at those lyrics again, I reckon they would fit well in some sort of black/death metal track, and I'm not taking the mick here Bjorn
 
 
cheers
 
andy

Great lyrics, Bjorn...   I liked the simple vocal + guitar arrangement, works well.  Though I could potentially hear just a little strings + reverb coming in for that last verse...  
 
For the clicks/plosive aspect, you said you've tried mic placement but does that include trying to sing off-axis and with a pop-screen?  I would think that'd cut down those hi-mids a bit. 
 

Great lyrics Bjorn. I agree with Steve on maybe adding something in the last verse just to add interest.

The best thing about this song is the honesty.
 
I can tell that you are a person of introspection, and I think that is a good thing.  Reflection is good.
 
Sure, there a things you might do to tweak it, but for raw truth, and concrete realization, you nailed it.
 
It is you,
 
I say, one of the best tunes I have heard on the forum... ever.  I mean that too.
 
naked soul exposed for the willing
 
Everything's going to be alright, you're moving in the affirmative direction.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Daryl
Thank you. Yeah, the ending on this version is kind of abrupt. I intend to flesh it out more.

Kakku
Thank you!

Jesse
I really appreciate the comments. They brought me out of a bit of a funk.

Beagle
Thanks for the encouragement!

Beautiful - well-written and played tune. The vocals are a bit upfront - other than that - this is a real gem.

I can identity with those lyrics Bjorn, 2 - 3am is my standard 'wake up & worry' time. Nicely done