You could snip off the 6 seconds of silence at the start. The piano arpeggios are pretty but went on too long alone. Nice when the bass and strings joined in, but the pizzicato hits were very odd. The ending just kind of fell apart. All in all, a pleasant piece, that seemed to need a top line melody.
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