however, feel free to check out the other one as well while you're there. The second song was written for a gymnastics floor routine...it is nothing too special though.
well .. i'm a pianist by training . . (and remember the dipthong after the "i" ;-) ) In my opinion,
you actually started to play the piece at around 3:18.
I'll offer the following suggestions:
1. You don't need to play in rigid time on a solo piano piece .. use timing to ebb and flow and
add feel to the piece. Someone in the modern era who is a genius at this is Glen
Gould ... Lyle Mays is pretty darn good too.
2. The modern piano has remarkable dynamic range ... use it! Plan your crescendos well .. and
build around them. Going from loud to quiet passages and building brings out the best in a piano piece...
they don't call it fortisimo for nothin, My feeling with your piece is that it's kind of like a compressor ..
the range got smooshed out.
3. The piano also covers a remarkable tonal range ... only a pipe-organ does more (outside of the realm of
synthesizers). But, you need to approach the ranges a lot like an orchestra .. emphasizing the right
ranges and changing which ranges are accentuated adds interest to a piano piece. Not letting one range
dominate throughout a piece is very important .. with yours , I feel the left hand (I'm guessing around
A3) is far too prominent throughout the piece. I think your goal was to drive it along with the left hand
octave / strong time approach .. but it becomes tiresome and forced after a bit.
Using the above, you can keep it moving along .. but in more than one dimension .. and that's interesting.....
Other ideas are to subtly alter each verse .. and/or throw in a key change to add color as you go.
I think the piece has potential .. but as Ed suggests .. it needs more work in order to stand by itself.
Jeff