My First Song!

Hi Alex,
First thing to do is figure out a bass part.
Think about structure, mood, hook, what is your message, or what are you trying to say? are you creating a mood, stirring emotions, making someone laugh, or cry.
This tune can be called music, but it's not going anywhere so it can't take us along.
No disrespect ment what so ever. You did ask!
On the positive side, it's a nice clean recording.
HTH

The chord progression reminds me of "Gangster's/Past Time Paradise." Coming from a dance or hip-hop kind of approach, the actual musical content can be quite simple, four chords can get you most of the way there. But there has to be something to catch the ear. Some kind of melody line, intrumental or vocal, would add a lot. As mewsician said, a good bassline is essential as well. It can be simple, but needs to be noticed.

A producer I worked with gave me this advice, that a good "pop" song (an easily remembered song, regardless of genre) is built on this foundation:
1) Groove
2) Melody
3) Texture

Listen closely to artists you like, try to listen to the individual instrument sounds, the arrangement, what makes the chorus or "hook" stand out from the verse. Keep making music, and you will keep getting better. Good luck!