I Go On

Hey There,

New song I wrote a couple of months ago - VC-64, T:L-64, and PerfectSpace on the Master, with a bit of Voxengo on the vox.  No lead guitar or keys on this one as of yet - tell me what you think - thanks.

-Doug

I Go On

I would tame that snare a little and maybe EQ a little (not much) of the brightness out of it, I would bring harmony in on the chorus (I go on, I see the sun/son) Maybe it will be there 2nd time, I hear the double. I definitely hear a pad or keys on the chorus, maybe a harmony 2nd time through. Definitely a lead instrument at 3:27 which could be playing some fills up to there and then take that break. Harmony builds on the last chorus, with the lead playing along :-)

But these are mostly production suggestions :-) And "everybody" is a producer... I like the song.

Robbie and Mark gave you some good advice....now to the tune...

Finished it!!!...lol

good stuff!

But I typically say go big or go home :-( I hear pretty much everything as a major production? (you should hear me in the bathroom in the morning... I'M GIVINER ALL SHE'S GOT CAPTAIN!)

Hi Doug,
 
I really like this tune- kind of a jazzy/ 'turn down day'(Cyrkle)/David Crosby(late Byrds period) sort of feel.
 
I think the spare arrangement works well.  I wouldn't add more than one more part- maybe a light, contrapuntal warm electric lead.
 
 
Cheers,
 
Bert

notnat - I like the song it's decent.

rockingrobby - thanks, I'll give the snare another listen - I doubled the vox on the chorus, but I didn't add a harmony.

mgh - thanks for listening - I'll give the snares and cymbals another listen.  I didn't add anything on the chorus - not sure what to do there yet.

Thanks again,
Doug

 I think you may have crossed into another sub-genre....Jazz rock? I think I'm hearing some 9ths and minors. I really like the consruct though! Good layout.

  I will tell you what I would do if it were me but you ain't me so take this with a grain of salt. I would take the tempo up a few notches. Not fast but a few ticks above where you are now.

  I was going to say that the drums sounded "splatty" to me but if you were in a bar with a real drummer this is probably what it would sound like. I like the spacial quality to the drums but I think I would EQ them slightly. In this song I see the drums as more a participant in the main song and not an underpinning to the song. For a 4 minute song though I would change the rhythm up here and there to make it more interesting.

   You have a great song here!

I like it.... and I usually like huge drums, but for this genre, I'm thinking a smaller dryer sounding kit just might be what is needed.... kinda like a cheap sounding kit with a funky sounding snare.... and maybe just a tad less busy on the drums.

Starise - thanks for listening, and I appreciate the comments.

Janet - thanks for listening.

Guitarhacker - thanks for listening - not sure about the drum kit - I like the groove.

twisted6d - thanks for listening.

guitartrek- thank - I used Addictive Drums and Groovemonkee - I've done a bunch of song lately, and I like to try different kits.  I should back off the snare a bit.

Beagle - thanks for listening - appreciate your comments on the vox.

bapu - thanks for listening for for the comments on my voice.  I'll have to listen to the intro again.

Nice tune Doug, and generally well done (the vocals in particular).  I found the cymbal work to be somewhat distracting, and I'd look to dial them back a bit.  For me, they had a tendency to pull my attention away from all that was good, and there was a lot of good stuff there.