Just curious for some feedback...

Hey folks!
 
 
I'm keeping busy these days producing the next Serenity Trace album and we put together this track that seriously stands out from the rest of them. So, I've put up a secret link to it here: http://soundcloud.com/mariush-2/the-beats-2012/s-hom6n
 
and I'm not wondering about the mix. It's horrible! Squashed and dreadful - so what I am curious about is what you think of the song it self, even if you think it sucks! The VO is a little random still and some synths are also a little out of control. But this will be better. Also, the vocals on the start is just the demo vocals. It will be re-done before it goes to mix.
 
If you take the time and listen to it with a comment or two on it I would really appreciate it
 
 
BTW, this song is by a severly aggressive metal band. It should surprise their fans

well, I'm on a notebook, so please "with a grain of salt?" the high stringy/paddy synths in the 1:20s and other spots seem a little too out front. And when the "what I will call background vocal part?" is there, you may need to do some EQ carves, and or try to make those parts a little more understandable? I'm talking like, the death metal part that starts around 3:11? and the speaking, I couldn't really hear it over the WOS? And the soft vox in the begining? I may bring that out/up a bit.

The song was interesting, not something I would normally listen to/hear. It feels a bit "occupyish?" like a protest song.

Listening on cans..... pretty cool.... it sure has a variety of things in it.

Sounds good to me. The VO is interesting. With DM in the background. 

This reminds me of some of my own  pieces that have so many elements that it takes time to sort them out and let each piece find its own place in the mix.  Some people eschew wide panning, but a piece like this calls out for it.  Once each part finds a place in the sonic spectrum,  EQ is not as necessary.  As for the song itself, it is somewhat eclectic so it's hard to call.  Let us hear it after you get a mix you like.  It's worth taking the time to get it right because sometimes these projects turn into gems when done right.

a deaf man could compose a better song 

ProjectM


Sheesh.. oh well. that's what you get for puting yourself out there I guess.

thanks for your comment!

I am just kidding - 


it was "ok"


















































if you are deaf AND have no natural ability for music 




that's what I meant 

Hi Marius, interesting tune for a metal band.  Not to sure about the ending after 3:40, sounds a bit "simple". Like the idea of the spoken voice.

Rik

Hi Marius, I should have said : I like the idea of the spoken voice.  The ending sounds a bit simple to me, the synth sounds very basic to me.

Rik

This sounds pretty good to me.  I like the heavily compressed female voice.

The only thing that sounds a little un-pro to my ears is that some of the drums are a little too harsh.  I recently fixed something like this in a mix of mine by running three stacked instances of the cakewalk tape-sim.  It's an old plugin, but it worked.

This really sounds good.  It's got a great energy.  Very positive sounding track.

Peace,

Ian

Very artistic, I really enjoyed it. Much more musical than your average urban. I like the timbres used but think some of the lead solo syth could use some dirtying up and effects possibly delay. I think the drums could use a bit of beefing up. Possibly add an additional hip-hop kick drum with some sub-low? Really cool though

Hi,Marius

This is a very unique blend of a few different styles and genres, but overall, I think it's modern sounding and kind of cool!  Very different, and, as Grant mentioned, very artistic.

Nice work, have a great day!
Bob

As you've stated - it needs some work yet, but some good ideas and I think I can see what your aiming for. I always like when people step out of their comfort zone and surprise you with something different. Reminded me of this ....hothead

Ohgrant - Thanks for your kind comments and your suggestions, especially the ones on the synths. I will try dirty. Should be interesting. I suppose the drums will be beefier than your average Wellington when the mixer is done with this. It is a drum song so I would imagine the focus will be there. Good tip with the sub, will try that

Rimshot - thanks for checking it out. Good points for mix and I will take note of your comments. I will also try ending it sooner like you suggest. Cheers! And age doesn't matter when it comes to music so your input is highly valued even if you're over 25 years of age

Bob - thanks for your kind words. It really strengthen my faith into the song

Scottytunes -  LOL, thanks for your awesome comment. Well, not everyone can like it, but I am glad you do

Paulo - Thanks for taking the time to listen. Yes, a lot of work is still to be done. I'll get around to it next week I hope and will post a new preview of the track. Yeah, we try to push out boundaries quite a lot with this but still have a kick ass song to show the fans

Digibiu - Thank you so much for the comment. And that's an interesting point of view. Yeah, I guess it could get too laid back if we went "by the book" with this. I'm not sure how we're going to sort out the voice yet but the phone thing is a good point. There's no chance of re-recording anything with this girl before the deadline but perhaps we could make it a little more answering machine or phone interview-ish or something. We'll definitely strive to take it outside of a musical context and have it sound sampled. If it doesn't work, maybe we try the idea of making a automated voice thing for it. Thanks! We'll see if there's a genius in there somewhere in the end, thank you for your kind words