Lady By The Sea-

This song has a rather unusual subject matter...so I guess I must be unusual...crits welcome...
 
The Lady By The Sea- https://soundcloud.com/starise/lady-by-the-sea
 
This is a song about a soul that is in transition between here and the other side, in this case a tragic end to her life leads to her being captive for a time...but eventually she can move on.
Lady By The Sea-
She stands gazing wispy islands far, she's lost her amusement on shame..a wandering thought moving on as a soul..and she sees in the night with no eyes.
While darkness is rampant afar, she seeks for a place she can rest,her calls no one hears, as dawn slowly nears. She sees spirits who live behind walls.
She's the lady who lives by the sea, sorrows friend crying endlessly..ran away from destiny and it pierced her with arrows of sorrow.
She's been dead nearly 200 years, but that really means nothing here, she's caught in between a place like a dream
and the spirits know that it's real.
Oh where will she go when it's time...the voices that speak they do lie, the choice will be hers and the lessons are learned...as she leaves in the dark, to go home.
She's the lady who stands by the sea sorrows friend crying endlessly...ran away from a destiny and it pierced her with arrows of sorrow.
Note- I will be improving this mix in the next several weeks.

Hi tim, very nice, good song. I like it.
 
rik

Great lead vocal work and sweet backing vocals.

Wow!  this is a great production, Tim!  love the sounds the BGV's, the piano, even the synth horns
 
my biggest problem, however, is that everything is competing for space.  you've got the piano hot on top of the vocals and the bass / low end is overpowering everything. 
 
really like the song - love the feel of it!

Really cool song! I think you could remove a touch of the low end in the vocal to give more room for the bass. Agree that the piano is just a little too loud during the vocal parts.
 
Keep working on this one, it sounds great!
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Cool song, Star. I really like how the vocals sound on this... I'm with steve on that a bit mellower, less characteristic piano sound would be ideal. The synths sound really awesome as well. Nice one!

Sorry I have been away guys...thanks for listening!!
 
I removed the bass and drums on this mix and replaced them. It seemed decent in my studio monitors, but after I uploaded it I listened in my cans and I'm thinking the bass is either too much or too busy...Opinions here are much appreciated. The mix was also changed in a few other places, specifically I added some choir voices tuned to a strange harmonic and mixed the tracks a bit more.
 
Rebel- Thanks for listening! I appreciate your comments. I will look into those piano sounds and try to get a better balance.
Rikki- Thank you! 
 
John- Thanks for listening! Yes a few more adjustments and hopefully this will be ready.
 
Mike- Thanks for listening. I made great use of Melodyne ARA!
 
Wookie- Many thanks for listening and commenting!
 
Beagle- Thanks for listening! Hopefully this is a bit closer now.
 
Herb- Thanks! You always have great suggestions! Thanks!
 
Dan- Thanks for listening. I  have this one on my list of things to change. Thanks you for the kind comments.
 
SteveC- Hmmm a darker tone...something I hadn't thought about, and more variation.  Thanks for the suggs.
 
Davedud- Thanks for listening. I will see what other sounds I have.
 
Rimshot- Than you for taking the time to listen to this. I'm hearing that less is more and I'll makecompressor adjustments.
 
Hopefully I can address these suggestions and get a new mix up soon. Take care guys!