Lillian- Melodic Death Metal Song

Personally, I like it. But then I like almost anthing metal...
 
Her voice works. I must admit I approached it with a little trepidation. For what it's worth there are two things that stick out to me. For one, I find the snare a little boxy sounding, there is a mid honk to me but in all fairness I should download it and listen on better speakers, others may disagree.
 
The other problem, for me anyways, was the lack of diversity in the vocal rhythm. I'm all for "four-on-the-floor" vocals but there is just too much repetition of accenting only on the beat and the song starts to feel plodding towards the end. Works OK for a while but needs some contrast, some syncopation to flesh out the movement of the piece. Too much of anything has a numbing anti-climactic effect.
 
While this is stylistically different, check this out:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y9aJ0ncWRvY
 
Notice how "straight" the screamo and cookie monster vocals are, at times, then into syncopated or melodic vocals. While this example is a little (a LOT!) extreme and possibly schizophrenic in a musical sense (although that's what I love), it will give you an idea what I mean. Check out the 1:00 mark for some straight 4 vocals, then contrast that the to beginning vocals. I think a small bit of rhythm deviation could go a long way in terms of creating a stronger "flow" thuout the piece.
 
Well done and I hope you'll take my post as "constructive" as opposed to destructive, whether you find the post of any use or not - you gotta do what you feel is right. To me, it's 90% there but of course that's just me, it's your music not mine.
 
Thanks for posting. Cheers and best to you.

I'll let you know about the snare but of course it's also personal tase. I guess the way I'd describe it is almost like a small midtange honk, like a small ring that guets pushed by compression but it really is unfair to say without better speakers and possibly better ears.
 
That region stuff is really annoying. This might work:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aVWsiz65au0
 
Very different style of music, that section is at 0:49 here since it's not an actual "video", but it might give you an idea what I meant in the above post. Of course bearing in mind it's all about stylistic and personal preferences.

My friend is the lead guitar player for Sacred Reich and what I'm missing here is the bass trying to put a hole in my body.  Of course that's easier to accomplish live!  They were big in the 70s and 80s and still play to sold out stadiums in Europe.  They just got back a month or so ago.  I can't remember how he classified their "metal" but this sounds like some of it.  I guess I would pump up the bass(shocking coming from a bass player, huh).  I'm listening on good monitors and that seems to be missing somewhat.  Just my thought.  I just listened again and can tell you that it definitely needs more bass from where I'm sitting.  Well done, though.  Some hot guitars.