Lost For You - RnB Pop (Feedback needed!)

Hi All,
 
I reworked an old song I had cowritten with a mate years ago, since Im putting together a collection of songs at the moment
 
It was originally acoustic but decided to go more RnB with this version.
 
Again can you point to any weak spots, changes, suggestions, etc
 
https://soundcloud.com/ci...vern/lfy-07nov/s-BMObc
 
 
Thanks,
 
Cian

I like it a lot. I think overall the vocals need to come up as well as the percussion. Maybe the snare is too hot. 
I just have to reach for the vocals (bkg included) a bit.

Thanks Randy,Rimshot, Kane. 
The vocals are probably getting buried because of the other instruments taking up too much room.
Ive made a few tweak above from above anyway.
 
Any elements distract you is this too overproduced?
 
https://soundcloud.com/ci...ern/lost-for-you-24oct
 
 
Cian

You have a very nice, evocative voice! And you did an excellent job of putting it in the mix just right. I doubt Abbey Road Studios could've done it any better.
Cheers!

Really nice piece, great melody and I'm a sucker for great bg vocals. Love your voice! I can't think of a thing I'd change. Love how the piano wanders about. Just wow, great song!

Well done Cian - love the vocals.

Top vocal works once again. Other than changing some of the synth sounds for better quality ones, there is nothing that I can say to improve this. Really cool track. thumbs up 

Well folks, thanks for your feedback. I have tweaked a newer version if you wish to follow on;
https://soundcloud.com/cian-mcgovern/lost-for-you-30oct/s-4Mlr6
 
Ekowitch - Great point and a very true statement. its knowing the note not to play as opposed what to play. In this version it should be less muddled.
 
Vanessa - Too Kind. close but not there yet!
 
Bert - My friend wrote the lyrics, the theme of the song can be felt but if I was asked to break it down I couldnt. The bass and drums are like that, but Im happy to have them for that type of genre. Im sure the samples could be better, but happy with that direction.
 
Kevin/Daryl - I will admit backing vox and adlibs are my strong points, but I have many points that are very weak, such as structurally solid basslines!
 
Markus/Leizer - Muchas gracias
 
Hi Guss, is that intro synth really that toylike and bad? Thanks for input.
 
Bob as always, thats for dropping on on this.
 
Cian
 
 
 
 

Such quality, as usual. Very well mixed and I like all of the upper register elements, but I'd vote for turning down your bass a little. I know the genre requires a punchy bass, but it's kind of drowning out your vocals and background vocals, which are pretty darn excellent, actually.
 
cheers,
-Tom

Cian,
 
I re-listened to this track. In the latest mix, the lyrics are more intelligible and they have the language of the heart.  The chorus/hook really grabs me. You've  really got something , here. The strong, soulful quality of the vocals overwelhms any crits of the rythm part. This song deserves to be heard.
 
Cheers,
 
Bert

I like this! You have talent and its clear. Keep doing what you do man.

Kerry, thanks for listening, thanks for following.
 
Tweaked another version for those who want another listen
 
https://soundcloud.com/cian-mcgovern/lfy-07nov/s-BMObc
 
Cian

Thanks Mike, I think it is a strong song and your right there is another 10% to be got out of this by making it punch and clearer and you could definitely get close with sonar, Im not quite there yet. The studios have better compressors and effects and most of all analog gear which adds a sparkle and glue that I reckon digital can never really emulate.
 
Cian

I always find myself liking your songs about 1/3 or 1/4 they way in...this time it was when the drums came in, you got me there and held me close till the end...GREAT JOB! -Shawn Lee Farrell

This is really a beautiful number Cian.  You have done a great job on this.  The instrumentation and especially the vocals are very well done.  The only nit-pick that I would have is the percussion.  To my unprofessional ears, they sound a bit synth or mechanical.  What were you using for the drums?  Drums have been one of my major nemesis in putting together my stuff.  However, that is a small point given the overall good sound of the song.
 
Nice one!