Hi Everybody,
This is the fifth track on my new album, "Incessant Absurdity".  Any comments and critiques are welcome, and thanks for listening.
 
Here it is:
https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v4/player.cfm?songID=13754631
 

Hi Doug 
I really like the melodies throughout the song including the chorus however the second voice in the chorus line is either too loud and needs to be put way in the background or removed completely in my opinion.

Here are my thoughts:
 

• Bass needs to be tamed a bit. It is filling up the frequency spectrum more than it should making the overall sound a tad muddy. This made you overcompensate the highs more than would otherwise be necessary.
• Cool tune! Kind of Cure meets Flock of Seagulls, as sung by Gary Numan.
• I'd bring the kick up somewhat, and tighten up the snare with some compression.
• Guitar solo gets lost here and there. Bring it more focus in the mix.
• The mix feels a little dense and could use more space to breathe better.

 
Not bad at all! I listened all the way to the end, so I did enjoy it, lol. Nice work.
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Hi Doug,
 
Nice song, reminded me of The Cure/New Order.
 
Thanks for sharing.
 
Good Job!
 
paul

I guess I don't have quite the ear the other guys do on the mix. I liked the way it was done. I liked the pic on the website. Reminds me of a daily activity I dread.
I found myself lost more in the melody than the actual meaning of the song. I went back twice and still didn't nail it down. The music puts you in a kind of mood that I liked.
For effect I might have played with the "closer" using some fx to give it a more  trippy vibe, but that's me.
Great song!

I enjoyed this tune and listened to it all the way through, reminds of those early 80's YES tunes. I would second what Dan has suggested and the mix could do with some added width. All in all though, nice song 

I really liked the chord progression in this.  it's reminiscent of classic rock from the early 70's late 60's.  Likewise in the way you treat the vocals.

Good song Doug. I'd take some of the reverb off the vocals, but otherwise I thought it was just fine.
 
Bill

Doug,
What Starise said above. I like the overall sound of the music which put me in a nice mood, and yet I wanted to hear something a bit more melodic. Hard to explain I guess.

daryl1968 - Thanks for listening and for your critiques - I backed off on the second vocal on the chorus - I think it sounds better now.
dcumpian - I took all your crits and made adjustments to the mix - thanks for your comments.
thegaltieribrothers - Thanks guys for giving my song a listen.
Starise - Thank you very much for listening and for your kind comments.
biodode - Thanks for your comments - I gave the BT Stereo Imager a try and I thought this added some width to the mix.
Wayfarer - Thanks for giving my song a listen - I backed off on some of the reverb on the lead vocal.
bjornpdx - Thanks for giving my song a listen.