OK! Writing is great, vocal works great, mix is mostly there (maybe dry up some reverb somewhere), guitar tones are awesome (but the left side darker one is pretty dark) - and as far as guitar goes, AWESOME choices, leads, rhythms, all of it.
 
Compositionally, very very much what I like.
 
The flute might come down a bit in that flute section?
 
 
But the thing I really think you might look at is the snare. I think it comes in just a hair late, behind the beat, particularly in the first third of the song. That's a disruption in the force, Luke.
 
The very end has an overlapping two-mellotrons-ending-at-different-times thing.
 
 
yeah, good stuff, Doug! Keep doin' whatchure doin'.
 
-Tom
 
 

emeraldsoul - Thank you very much for your comments and critiques.  Drum tracks are always a challenge for me - I write all my songs on acoustic guitar, and then later I search through numerous drum grooves to find the right feel for the song.  I hope this one wasn't too bad.  Anyway, thanks for listening.

Good stuff Doug. All round a better package.
Are you pleased with it?

Tad to much reverb on the vocal for my taste, but it is your song, thanks for sharing nothing else I can add that has not already been said.

daryl1968 - I think it's a better mix now - thanks for your help and for listening - I appreciate it.
 
Wookiee - Thanks for giving my song a listen.  You might be right about the lead vocal - there's a BT echo on it, and it may be a bit much.  I think I'll do another mix and dial that back some.