Thank you very much for your excellent critiques and compliments peeps!!
I find all of the suggestions valid to some point and some I will be able to remedy with further edits of this song.
Adding a bridge may be the hardest suggestion of all because the music sections are loops that I purchased and chopped up and mixed and mastered in Cakewalk.
I can perhaps EQ the music to make the strings and drums less present (great suggestions) and I agree it is slight on the bass where I might add another bass to give it more distinct clarity on the low end which would balance some of the shreaky high end.
The music has been a big problem in this song with it stepping on the vocals and I have used compression sidechains to remedy that as much as possible, it was much worse than it is now.
Harmony and dubbing vocals would help the vocal stand out more and give it more fidelity and dynamics. Adding vocals is a great suggestion too!
Perhaps if I add expressive violins to existing strings it might give it less of a dated feel.
Like the song The Morning After by Maureen McGovern with the typical overproduced orchestra feel it is a bit better than that (though I love that song) but I can see the comparison and I do not mind that point being put forth.
Like and old TV show intro like McMillan and Wife or Quincy hehe it does have better fidelity than that but I can still see the comparison. :)
My voice reminds me of two singers in this song, one, is Glen Campbell and the other is Jackson Brown.
On the Glen Campbell side that is where the dated feel seems to come out the most.
I will try and edit some of the concerns and please check back for future edits of this song.
:)